My soul still search for you.
For five long years, I was able to avoid this street. I was able to erase this area. I wanted to avoid you. I wanted to avoid us.
Until my car stopped. It ceased to move, for reasons I don’t know. I guess it brought me here. To the corner we call our own.
Winter, spring, summer and fall, this bench was ours.
It was a cold December night when you find me in this corner. I said my name, you said yours.
It was a blooming April morning when you asked me to be yours. Of course, I said yes.
It was a hot yet so bright July afternoon when you gave me that ring. I said I love you and you said you do, too.
I waited for you on that fateful day of October. I can vividly smell the earth-scents and feel the sky-winds as I saw you walk towards me.
I thought it was you. But it wasn’t you. I thought you will come for me. But instead, I went to see you. I waited for you on our corner. But you didn’t wait for me. It’s humidly autumn, but you laid still, chillingly frozen.
“Enough,” I said to myself.
I went back to my car because I cannot stand to be in this corner anymore.
I ran, then stopped abruptly when I saw my bloody self inside my crushed car.
Yay! This is the first time in so many years that I crafted a fictional very-short story and this feels great!
This post is inspired by Blogging University’s WRITING 101 Day 4 assignment.
Day 4: A story in a single image
Yesterday, you found inspiration in one word and used it as a springboard for a post idea. Images — including photographs and works of art — can also act as starting points for stories, essays, poems, and personal musings. For this exercise, use one of the images above as the creative spark for today’s post. You might use it as the setting for a story or poem, write about how it makes you feel, or describe a memory conjured by it.
NOTE: This story has already a second part. Seasons Part II.
Please share your thoughts.
I highly value your comments, fellow bloggers. 🙂
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Thank you! Thank you so much! I am heading to your blog now! 🙂
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Wow. I really enjoyed this. I felt oddly as if I knew the character, or had been to that corner. 😀 Beautiful atmosphere.
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Thank you. Thank you. Thank you. I was afraid I wasn’t able to write a relatable story. I am intimated by the great posts from you and our fellow bloggers.
Thanks a lot!
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Oh my. Very poignant article. Very well written.
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Hi Jacqueline! Thank you so much! I was not that confident with this post after I read a lot of great stories written by you and our fellow bloggers. So thank you. Really.
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Sometimes, those ones we don’t expect much from surprise us 🙂
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That is true! Again, thank you so much! 🙂
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You are welcome
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I like this! You’ve done a wonderful job capturing the emotion.
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Thank you so much, Nick! I mean it. I really really do! 🙂
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Touching! Unexpected ending. Love your take 🙂
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You have no idea how your words make me so happy today! I have replied in almost all the comments here on my post that writing a fiction is somehow new to me and after I have read your works, I felt less and less confident.
But your words are just so… touching. Thank you so much!
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Thanks for your compliment. ☺️ I am still learning, and lacking in many ways. Many writers have encouraged and motivated me along the way. Let’s learn and grow together 🙂
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That would be fun! It is always better to learn and to grow when you have companion! Let’s be friends, virtually? 😀
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✋🏻 (hi-5) 🙂
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😀
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Well written and an intriguing ending which could be interpreted in several ways! Nicely done!
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Aw! That’s just so heartwarming. I have read a lot of stories about today’s assignment and I felt I didn’t do good enough.
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It’s always good enough because YOU created yours! 👍
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I am blushing now! Thank you, really. 🙂
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👍👍👍
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Yes, very well done. You have some talent!
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Thank you so much! I am not so confident with my post and your words mean a lot to me
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Oh wow you have written it like a pro. I could feel her pain to be standing alone waiting.. Until the end which was quite unexpected.. Good one
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Seriously? (I think I am about to cry now). I am not confident about this post after I read a looot of awesome stories from you and my fellow blogger.
Your words mean a lot to me. 🙂
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Aw thank you, and you are a good writer:)
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Nice twist. Nicely written,touching.
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Really, Indira? Really? I feared that it is not as good as I thought is was.
Thanks a lot!
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Its wonderful dear.
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Thank you! 😀
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Thrilling. I enjoyed it!
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I’m glad you did. I am a bit anxious when after I published this. I think I am not good in writing fiction. 😀
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No need to be anxious. Believe in yourself. You did this one well:)
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Again, thank you sooo much, Annie! 🙂
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It’s a very touching story, Rose.
Poetic, sensitive and comely ❤
I love the picture too ❤
I have shared it on FB, Twitter and Google.
My best wishes,
Anand 🙂
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Thank you! I become less and less confident about this post after reading a lot of great stories. So your words mean a lot! 🙂
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We always doubt our creativity. A sign of sensitive artists 🙂
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Really? 🙂 Is it a good sign? 🙂
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Good upto an extent. later you need to get over anxiety and fly in the creative sky. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Thank you! 😀
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WELCOme, Rose 🙂
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So powerful! So vivid. what an amazing write! Thank you x
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Uh. 🙂 Thank you so much! Really. really. Really. 🙂 You don’t know how much your words are for me as this is my first short story ever. 😀
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this was bloomin fab if you havent done it before. clearly your a natural!
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That’s so sweet! Thanks a lot again! 😀
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Great writing, what an unexpected ending!
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That’s how I really wanted it to happen! I was afraid that it might be predictable. 😦 So your comment has uplifted my spirits! Thanks a lot! 😀
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What exactly is the ending? I don’t understand “And saw bloody self inside my car”. Is that supposed to be him or you? or what exactly happened, are we supposed to guess….
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I’m glad you asked. 🙂 It’s “And saw my bloody self..”
I hope you liked it. (My heart’s beating fast now. Because I am really anxious to hear your thought about it.) 🙂
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this is great!! omg I got a goosebumps
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Oh my! That is the comment that I have been waiting for! 😀 That’s a dream come true for me! Really! Thank you soooo much!
I am a fan of books that can give me goosebumps and I dream of doing the same to my reader so… I am just so happy. I think my tears are coming now. :’)
Thank youuuu!
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This is fantastic, you go girl..!!!! Not even for a moment my mind got distracted. You writing kept me captivated wanting to know more, pushing me to read the next sentence. Well done. You have a bright future in writing. Good luck. God bless.
Best
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Awwww! I really cannot thank you enough! Your words are just the greatest encouragement that I have. 🙂 Thank you. This is my first-ever short fiction story and I really can’t help by cry out of happiness. Thank youuuu!
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It’s a very good story, captivating…:)
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Thank you! Thank you! Sooo much! 😀
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That story gave me the chills at the end. Excellent take on the prompt. Well-done!
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Aww. Your words are just so sweet and I cannot help but cry out of happiness. This is my first-ever fictional short-story. You don’t know how much your words mean to me. Thanks a lot! :’)
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Goosebumps time! Good!
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You’re the second person to say that! And I really think I can’t help but cry now! :’) Thank you! I am not so confident about this fiction story but your words are just so heart warming. Thank you!
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2nd time of reading. Very strong. Took me on a journey of images and thoughts. Question, who was waiting at the corner? And the ending, quite shocking! Feeling nice until the end, still questioning. Excellent writing.
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Thank you for the questions. 🙂 I don’t want to answer them, though. Sorry. 😀 That’s my purpose, for my reader’s to interpret my story. 🙂 Thank you sooo much!
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This is awesome! Was the narrator texting and driving? lol just thought but I get it I get it
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Thank you for reading my post! 😀
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That’s beautiful! I think most of us can relate to this story.
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Thanks, Cathy! 😀 Yes. I really tried to make it relatable and intriguing as well. 🙂
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Powerful writing, Rosema! Until the last sentence, I was sure it was a story about a woman and a man who met on the bench and fell in love. But after reading the last sentence, I had to second-guess everything! 🙂 Now I wasn’t sure if it was a story about you meeting yourself, getting to know yourself, through the seasons of a year. But I think you wanted us to be uncertain, ha ha ha! I like it!
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Exactly! You got the story right and you also got my intention. I want you to interpret it in your own way. 😀
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Rosema, I love twist at the end! This was every engaging. I also like your site in general!
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Thank you for your awesome words Tracey! I am really glad that you love my site. 😀
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Excellent story! It was descriptive enough to let the readers imagination fly. Be confident in what you do. You are as good as anyone else out there! 😉
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Aww! This is just so heartwarming. Really. I am still afraid but your kind words are helping me a lot! Thank you! 😀
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A wonderful response to the prompt ~ You have a very natural talent ~ 🙂
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Thanks, John! Your words mean a lot to me. 😀
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Short, precise, yet explanatory. Nice work. Love it. Cheers!
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Thank you! Thank you so much! 😀
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This is a great, inspiring and well written ❤
You are really talented ❤
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Thank you, Nadine! Will visit your blog now! 😀
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Well done lady! Gave me goosebumps 🙂
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Oh my! Thank you! Thank you so much! That’s my dream. To write a fictional story that will give goosies to my readers. You just made a dream come true. :’)
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Sorry, I wrote you earlier encouraging you to try writing short short. I had forgoten that you are so brilliant in the above text that is a kind of short story. I read it two days ago and I gave you a Like! It is great piece of work, a pazzle of setences and the emotions are so deep and meaningful.
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Oh. No need to be sorry. It’s totally fine. 😀 And.. thank you for reading!!! 😀
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You really surprised me when you said it was fiction. That was really great and it sounded real. So touching. My favourite line is:
“It’s autumn but you’re frozen.”
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Wow. That’s good to hear. 🙂 Thank you so much! 🙂
I have written a second part of this story. I hope you can read it and critique it, too! 🙂
Season Part II.
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Hi Rosema, you’ve written a wonderful fiction. Congrats! 🙂
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Yay! Thank you. I hope you have read the 2nd and 3rd part also. 🙂
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WOW! Your endings are so amazing. They stop my breath. So unexpected. This is excellent.
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Thank you Kathy! I don’t know why but I only read your comment just now. 😦
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Very well done. Great feel to it and the end was perfect substituting out a bad ending for a much worse one.
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Oh wow! Thank you very much! ❤
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