Awakened by the loud jeers, cheers of the playing boys outside, I slowly went out of bed. He’s standing just outside our bedroom door staring, waiting for me. He offered his hands with a weak smile. I smiled back and took his hand to his surprise.
Outside, I gripped his hands tighter as my eyes adjust to the shining sun. Then I saw the cheerful and loud boys. Stubborn tears fall. The vivid memories of my four soccer-playing sons rushed back.
Wrapping his around me, he softly whispered, “It’s okay, love. Our boys are surely playing in heaven too.”
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Word count: 100
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Yinglan
In response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) August 09, 2016.
Rules:
- a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less)
- each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end
- no serial (continuation) stories
- include a pingback to the challenge post
Thank you for hosting this awesome prompt, Priceless Joy!
Oh dear, oh dear… this is beyond heartbreaking. The pain that their parents must have felt deep inside is incomparable. 😥
P.S. Dearieee, I only brought one body bag. Why must it be four? Huhu
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Yes, dear. I can only try describing it but I will never be able to fully grasp it. (And I hope I won’t experience it.)
P.S.
Uh oh. That will be a problem dearie. Sorry about that. -_-
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I hope none of us won’t… Sigh.
No worries dear. I brought extra today. 😁
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HAHAHA! Girl scout! 😀
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Yes, dear! HAha
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thanks dearie!! 😀
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Heartbreaking Rosema. You must write the story behind the story.
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oooh. Thank you very much, Davy. 🙂 We’ll see. 🙂
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Oh, such a sad sad ending! Wonderful story, Rosey. It would be absolutely terrible to lose all 4 of your children! I can’t even imagine it.
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yes dear. I can only try to express the pain but i know it will never be enough. i cannot fully grasp the pain. and i don’t want to feel it either.
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I can only imagine how painful it would be and it would be terrible! I hope I never do experience it too!
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yes! me, too! 🙂 ❤
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Wow.. Poignant. Love it. 😢
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oh thank you, Joy. Sorry it is so sad.
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wonderful story , Sad and gripping, though, can’t imagine losing 4 children. Wow , it best not to even imagine.
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i agree, Oba. I can only try expressing the pain but i cannot fully imagine it. i don’t want to feel it either. thank you for reading, dear. ❤
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So true dear, great post.<3
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thank you very much, Oba! 😀
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The couple has a home near a soccer field, or maybe they live at a boarding school. Your verse possesses the sadness of Goodbye, Mr. Chips. Evocative work, sister.
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yes. they are near a soccer field, brother. a mini soccer field where boys play. Thank you very much, brother. Who is Mr. Chips? 😀
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Great story, very touching and really well written.
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Hi, Ian! Thank you very much for reading and for your kind words. 🙂
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With this story you took me back to 1914-1918 and the terrible losses suffered
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Hi Michael! Thank you for reading and for your comment. 🙂 I think your blog is not linked to your gravatar? May I ask you a link to your blog so I can visit you too? 🙂
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Oh my what a tearjerker this one is! What a lovely write!
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yay! thank you dear Mel! I thought you’ll mention the body counter again. 😀 😀 😀
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🙂 True though the bodies hit the floor outside the frame of the story, so do they count? 😉 You’re welcome
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oh yeah!! that’s a great analysis detective Mel! 😀
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You’re welcome 😊
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❤ ❤ ❤
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A powerful heartbreaking read! 🙂
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awww. thank you, Saima!
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Aw man.
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this hurts, i know.
thank you, love!
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It’s okay. It’s always a compliment when you can inspire the feels. 💕
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yay! Thank you! 😀
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Always!
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❤ ❤ ❤
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Lovely pic n post
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thank you! 🙂
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Oh so sad.
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I agree. ❤❤❤
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Oh dear! That’s painful. I wonder what happened?
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accident, dear Jacq. Thank you for reading!
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A pleasure to read, though that must be a painful reality for someone.
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yes. i cannot imagine it dear. i cannot.
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