This is the first sonnet I have written on my own and yes, I am nervous. (Forgive me if I did not observe the required iambic pentameter!)
Scarred Heart: A Sonnet*
My heart is a pristine, clean, plain canvass,
so white and pure, innocently demure.
It beats in bliss, sometimes slow, sometimes fast
always full, always sure, never impure.
Like a blossoming bloom it smells so sweet,
brought by nectar– its fragrant honey flesh.
Then like a buzzing bee looking for treats,
you suck hungrily ‘till I’m left a mess.
My heart’s once bright petals started to wilt,
as the ghost of your love tears up my leaves.
Promises uttered broken without guilt,
stems wreaked havoc, buried in dark deep eve.
When will my scarred heart bloom and beat again?
Please tell me, scars won’t forever remain.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Unsplash
In response to Daily Post: Scars and Napowrimo Day 23. (yes, I’m catching up! :D)
Today, I challenge you to write a sonnet. Traditionally, sonnets are 14-line poems, with ten syllables per line, written in iambs (i.e., with a meter in which an unstressed syllable is followed by one stressed syllable, and so on). There are several traditional rhyme schemes, including the Petrarchan, Spenserian, and Shakespearean sonnets. But beyond the strictures of form, sonnets usually pose a question of a sort, explore the ideas raised by the question, and then come to a conclusion.
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All sonnets should be:
- a lyrical meditation. The sonnet should sing.
- usually composed with themes of love, spirituality, nature, sorrow or celebration.
- a quatorzain , (a poem in 14 lines).
- metric. In English, the sonnet is primarily written in iambic pentameter.
- rhymed. The rhyme scheme is one of the features that identify the individual sonnets. (The Unrhymed and Blank sonnets by name deliberately lack rhyme which technically would be a nonce unrhymed scheme.) See the Sonnet Comparison Chart.
- written with question-answer or conflict-resolution structure.
- composed with a turn or change in tone. It is the positioning of this pivot or volta that is also a defining feature of sonnet.
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Read more of my Napowrimo 2016 poems here!
It’s a beautiful sonnet, Rosema. It seems we’re both playing a little catchup here!
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Geez! Thank you so much, Jade!
Yeah!! I am playing catchup! 😀 You too? 😀
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Yes indeed! I’m only a few days behind. I’m determined to see this through. Better late than never is kinda my motto xD
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HAHAHA! I would like to share that motto with you!! 😀
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One motto fits all LOL
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HAHAHA! Exactly!
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Brilliant first attempt! Take a now, my dear Princess!
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Geeeez! Now that means a lot coming from my Queen! ❤ ❤ ❤ Thank you very much!
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🙂
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You write directly–and metaphorically–about love, pain, and hope. “The sonnet should sing”? Yours would make a moving song.
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GEEEZ! That is a bit of my concern, too, Christopher. (Aside from the iambic pentameter that I honestly have no idea on how to do!). I am thankful for affirming that my first try on sonnet surely sings! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Beautiful, Rosema!!
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Thank you very much my dear PJ! ❤
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it’s perfect! You wrote a beautiful sonnet; I love the metaphors especially the floral one in lines 5-9 🙂
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Thank you very much! It means a looooot because you’re my teacher! 😀 I am quite nervous about this and
I can now sigh because my teacher liked it. 😀 🙂 😀
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I loved it! Your sonnet blew me away with its lyrical power and its beautiful imagery.
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YAY!! Those words are more than what I hoped for. So dearest Mel.. thank you very very much! ❤
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You’re welcome 🙂
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What a perfect and beautiful piece for a first attempt. Clap.clap.clap! 😀
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YAY!! Thank you very much! that means a lot to me my dear. ❤
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This is your first one?! It’s beautiful! :]
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Yes, my first one written on my own. 🙂 I have four sonnets written with a lovely poetess named Mel. 🙂
Thank you!!! That means a lot. ❤
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This is really so beautiful rose … salute to your attempt … I have been dreaming to write sonnet but still not able… keep up rose … You are going great doing awesome …. the last line is just … glowing …. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Oh I believe you can write your own sonnet too! 🙂 Thank you very much!
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Yes someday…. have a great day rose …
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Good luck! 🙂 Thank you!
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Awwwee! The hopeless romantic writer in your strikes again, Rosema. This is beautiful and I love the flow of your poem- the excitement of falling in love at first, then the pain, then comes resignation, but in the end… there is always hope. Beautiful. Beautiful. Beautiful! ❤
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YEEEE! YOur comment just make my day even brighter! You surely summarized the essence of this poem, dear Maria!!! ❤ ❤ ❤ Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
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It’s a lovely and poignant poem, dearie. ❤ You're most welcome! 😉
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Thank you very much, dear Maria! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Basta ikaw dear. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Tamis! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Lovely sonnet. Some scars fade, but the scars of the heart usually stay. But we learn from our scars. Reminded my if a song ‘Jar of Hearts’ by Christina Perri. http://youtu.be/8v_4O44sfjM
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GEEEZ! I love that song, Mandi!! Thank you very very much!
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Lol. 💕
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I loved this but am a sonnet free zone to date as far as my own work goes – I have an eight beat to the bar brain for some reason. Perhaps you will inspire me.
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oh wow. that’s so humbling. thank you!
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