Broken Dream: A Cinqku*
her arms,
her breath’s warmth,
bring me to life;
tears flow, smile fades, she’s been
long dead.
—
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Photo credit: Rodion Kutsaev
In response to Daily Post: Contrast
Cinqku is a 5 line haiku attributed to American poet Denis Garrison found at Poetry Bridge. It particularly explores the use of the line break and retains the maximum syllable count of the haiku. (Note: the haiku is a small poem of 17 syllables or less, the Cinqku is more restrictive with a strict syllable count of 17.) The Cinqku should have a turn or surprise in L4 and L5.
The Cinqku is:
- a pentastich, a poem in 5 lines.
- syllabic. A strict syllable count of 2-3-4-6-2 syllables per line.
- composed with a turn or surprise in L4 or L5.
- untitled.
Wonderful as alwz
:p
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You’re such a sweet lady dear!! ❤❤❤
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Less than u :p
Lots of love to u
: )
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Really? 😀
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No doubts :p
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❤
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see. you’re as sweet as me! 😀
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Haha
no!
Less than u!
See; even ur name is Rose-full
:p
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HAHAHA! okay. I concede! 😀
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Sad memories. Beautiful expressions
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Oh thank you dear Jacq. 🙂
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Oh I love this! This form is new to me. I must give it a try:)
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yeah! go! 😀 you can write one, too, for sure!
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Oh I love this! I admit, haiku never really captured me (I think I’m looking for rhythm not just in music but in poems too) but this version sounds a lot better to my ears. And of course your talent just made it better. 😊
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Aww. That is so great to know, Andi! thank you so much! I guess I love putting rhythm in my poems, too! 🙂
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I really like this form and you execute it well. The turn was particularly well done and definitely surprised me.
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Wow! thank you very much! 🙂 I am so glad you liked the sudden required twist. 🙂
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Wonderful poem! She may be dead but your memory keeps her alive.
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I agree my dear. Just like Mitch Albom’s word says, death ends a life not a relationship. 🙂
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cool form, I had no idea there were so many versions of haiku 🙂 You executed it well my friend.
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Yeah! There’s a loooot of poetic forms! 😀 (and I am avoiding those who are a bit long. haha)
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I had no idea there were so many. I am getting a poetic education from you 🙂 🙂 🙂
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From me??!! No! That couldn’t be! 😀 😀 😀
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Yes! You are introducing me to many new forms and I am grateful for the introduction 🙂
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yay! glad to do that! AND! I figure some poetic forms are meant to be done by two poets!!! And I am sooooo excited to write some poetic-form-collabs with you! 😀
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oh that would be awesome! You can teach me these new forms! 🙂 I am looking forward to it 🙂
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oh no. i cannot teach you. we’ll learn together. 😀
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Great idea! 🙂
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after this napo and atoz! 😀
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🙂 I hear you!
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i shared the link of our future poetic forms! HAHA, and I AM excited! 😀
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🙂 yay! Can’t wait!
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me too! 😀 😀 😀
April’s about to end soon! 😀
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we still have a couple weeks 🙂 what’s the rush?
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I am loving the NaPo and AtoZ but I am also excited to learn new forms and collab with you. HAHA 😀
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What if this were dreamed truly? How striking and how haunting!
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yeah! it’s actually like…. he is on the verge of death too.. like she is coming for him already. 🙂
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You definitely got that “turn” down well in this poem! I’m so glad you’ve included the description of each form. I’m learning something new every day!
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yay! i am glad to share it with you, Amy! 🙂 yeah.. i think i love turns! 😀
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I always love that part of sonnets–the turn where something unexpected happens. It’s often subtle, but it’s intriguing to see what twist the author has in mind.
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Yeah. That is so true. I have written only one sonnet and it is indeed a challenge. 🙂
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Perhaps the sonnet could be your S–or you could use it for P since there are Petrarchan sonnets. I can’t remember rules for any of them very well!
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Thank you, Amy! I am still fearful with sonnets. I am not brave enough to write my own. 😀 😀 😀 And my P is a Pantuom while my S in a Shape Poetry. 🙂
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I haven’t heard of a Pantuom… Looks like I’ll learn yet another form from you this month!
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thank you, Amy! 😀 I hope you’ll like my first Pantuom. 🙂
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Oh Wowza! First, for the words–beautiful; and second, for the poetry form–WOW.
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yay! thank you, Azul! 😀
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Most welcome!
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❤
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Ouch! The ‘surprise’ sure surprised me. Everyday is a learning experience here 🙂
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yay! thank you very much, NJ! ❤ i love surprises, especially vicious ones. 😀
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Namaste!
I’ve nominated you for The Liebster Award
pls do participate!
https://jyoteeblog.wordpress.com/2016/04/06/liebster-award/
: ))
With lots of love and wishes
Isolated_girl
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Hi Lovely! I am so sorry I found this comment in my spam box. 😦
Nonehtheless, thank you dear! ❤
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At least found!
cheers my dear
love
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yeah! that is true! thank you dear!
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Thank you too sweety
: p
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thank you! 🙂
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