I should be sad after the call has ended, but I am not, surely not.
“Your father is dead.”
‘Oh’, is the only word I was able to say.
“His remains will be at the Grace Baptist Church starting tonight.”
“Okay.”
“Will you be there?”
“I might.”
“We hope to see you.”
“I will try. It’s late. Bye.”
He is my father, the man who gave those millions (or billions?) of sperms. Luckily (or not?) I won the race and made my way to my mom’s womb.
He is my father, but for him, I am just his illegitimate daughter. A daughter he accidentally made when he raped their home’s maid. A daughter with a dirty old mother who begged for financial support. A beg he never heeded.
Shaking with anger and decades-old rage, damn!
I promised myself I won’t cry because of him again!
I won’t!
Please, tears, don’t!
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Word count: 150
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Sunday Photo Fiction
In response to Sunday Photo Fiction for February 20, 2016.
Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly writing challenge hosted by Alastair Forbes where a photo is used as a prompt for a piece of fiction using around 200 words. The piece doesn’t have to center around exactly what the photo is, it can be just used as a basis for a story.
You wrote it well. I am not particularly fond of him either!
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Oh… thank you so much, Jacq. It is unfortunate how some man can be like this.
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Very much so unfortunate.
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Yes.. So sad.. Yet this is true. It happens. Sadly.
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Beautifully written.
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Oh thank you so much, Deb! 😀😀😀
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Good story. not what I expected at the end. Let’s hope he burns in hell.
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Thank you! The first draft that I have written has a bit softer ending. Like she forgives and so on. But I decided to do away with that. Cause in reality, forgiving isn’t really that easy to give.
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I did that in one of my stories a couple of weeks ago. I went for the softer ending and then changed it. Sometimes the hard hitting finish is what is necessary.
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It is true. And it is also a bit more realistic?
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Wow! I would have sent an assassin if he wasn’t dead. You evoke a strong emotion in this wonderfully written story. Way to go, my friend!
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Assassin?!! 😂
Well you are right, what he did is truly despicable.
Thank youuuu so much my dear Fun!
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Always your faithful supporter! 😍
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That is sooo true. You have always been my number one fan, Fun! And I loooove you for that! ❤❤❤
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Yay! 😍😍😍
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❤❤❤
Good morning my dear Fun!
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Good morning, my dear Rosema! Have a great week! 😍❤️❤️❤️
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Yay! You started my week with a lot of goosies and laughter, so I will surely will! 😀
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So glad to hear that! 😄❤️❤️❤️
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YAY! 😀 😀 😀 I mean it my dear! 😀
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I know you do! 😍😍😍
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Awww! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Maybe that’s how he died anyway 🙂
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Hahaha! Probably! Number 1 on the assassin name list!
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Uh oh. Hahaha!
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😄😄😄
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What if?? It was the daughter who actually paid for the assassin? Uh oh!
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Wow! It’s leading to a detective story! 😄
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Yeah! Hahaha! It’s because of you! 😂
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Yay! New inspiration! 😄😄😄
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HAHA! It has always been you! 😀
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🙂
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🙂
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Hahaha! You are right! Maybe!:D
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Oh, wow. So much feelings. I wonder what she did in the end. Did she stay away? Did she go to the funeral? I guess it depends on how much does she hate her father, her flesh and blood, who may also be the bane of her existence.
Lovely write, my dear. 🙂
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Oh wow to your comment, Annie! 🙂 You surely made such an insightful points. I guess she will.
Actually, my first draft for this has a softer ending. Like the last line is: I hope tomorrow I’ll find forgiveness in my heart.
But I deleted it and opt for a tougher ending. Because I think forgiveness is not actually easy to give. I don’t want the ending to be a cliche. What do you think? 🙂
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It’s perfect, as it is 🙂
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Aww. Salamat, Annie. 😘
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He sounds like a felon and a dead beat dad. I would say, don’t go to his funeral. 😀
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Hahahaha! You and Fun almost have the same reaction. 😀 😀 😀
I don’t know if she will come. But she might. 😀
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Hahahaha!
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😀
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wow what pain she feels. I have a character who went through this. He ended up at the funeral because his half brothers convinced him to go. He got his closure. I hope your character got hers.
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Ohhhh… Wow. Great minds think alike? 😀
Actually… my first draft for this has that ending. Not the exact scene that she will be there but a conversation between her and her good husband. The last line is: I hope tomorrow I’ll find forgiveness in my heart. 🙂
But I opt to delete those part. I want it to be an open ended tale. 😀
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Powerful piece.
Good snapshot of a life in pain.
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Oh thank you so much! 🙂 Your words mean a lot. ❤
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You so quickly create tension and confusion–and other emotions severely felt. Wow, well-done!
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YAY! Thank you so much, Christopher! I tried to delve on such a tragic topic and I am glad my words evoked such emotions. 🙂
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Haunting story. I wouldn’t want to be at his funeral after knowing he raped my mother. But I guess you go because it’s polite,candy a better person then he ever was.
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Oh thank you, Mandi. 🙂 I am not so sure yet if she will come. She might or she might not. 🙂
P.S.
You change your photo? It’s sooooo lovely! ❤
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Yes, I did. Thank you Rosema. It’s a couple-years old.
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Oh! 🙂 You’re just gorgeous. 😀
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Thank you Rosema, that is so sweet of you to say. If I were with you I’d hug you lol. 🙂
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YAY! I’d give you some fluffy hugs too! 😀 😀 😀 (I am fluffy! :D)
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“Please, tears, don’t!” ~ this line hits the hardest. The feeling of holding off your tears and strong emotions is the most excruciating of all. I can feel that s/he has been keeping her anger and longing (coz I believe deep inside s/he still longs for a father) until the very end.
A very emotional piece, Rosema. You did it again! 😀
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OH thank you, my dear Maria. Yes… I think holding off the tears brings greater pain to her. 🙂 Her dad, no matter how he hates him, is still his dad. And that is that hole she has forever.
Thank you, again! 🙂 I tried to be emotional. HAHA. ❤
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I totally agree with you… 🙂 Hmm, I like the emotional Rosema and the poetic one and the in love one and even the sadist one. Haha. You’re most welcome, Rosema! 😍
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Hahahah! You love almost all versions of the writer in me. Haha. My heart’s about to burst now. ❤❤❤
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Because your posts are lovable and so are you! 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Awww.
You are making me smile a lot Maria!
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Smile is one’s best curve. Smile a lot, Rosema. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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So let’s smile a lot.
^________________^
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From ear to ear! 😀
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Yes! And even beyond! 😉
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Hahaha. That’s a very wide grin!
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HAHA! Yes. Indeed it is! 😀
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😀 😀 😀
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❤ ❤ ❤
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I think it’s your last line that really clenches at my heartstrings. Great response on the prompt, Rosema!
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Ooooh! Thank you, Jade! 🙂 Have you posted yours? 🙂
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You have penned this so well, Rosema. It’s sad that this has happened to so many. This is the dark side of humanity.
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Yes. Dark side indeed. The truth that some men can be like this is real life is beyond my comprehension.
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Beyond mine, too, my friend.
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So true. -_-
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Oh and thank you, Thomas. Your words warmed my heart again. 🙂
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You are welcome, Rosema. I am happy to have warmed that wonderful heart of yours 🙂
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Yay! Salamat! ❤
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Walang anuman! ❤
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Wow! How’d you know that? 😱
Google? 😀
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I know a bunch of words in a few languages. 🙂
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Woooow! That’s coool!
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Heartbreaking. Great twist. Great story.
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Oh, thank you so much for your heartwarming words. I appreciate them so much. ☺😊
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It’s amazing how some people don’t realise the consequences of their actions. Powerful writing.
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That is true, Sally. Thank you so much for reading. ❤
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