Astrobleme: An Abhanga*
you are the huge meteor
that dig a deep crater
still hollow years after—
no time can heal.
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Word Inspiration: Sarah Doughty of Heartstring Eulogies (Thank you, Sarah!)
*Abhanga, “the completion” is a stanzaic form commonly used for devotional poetic composition although it has also been used for cynicism, satire and reflective moods. It was popular from the 13th thru 17th centuries Marathi Region of India and is described as complex and classic.
The Abhanga is:
- stanzaic, written in any number of 4 line stanzas.
- syllabic, 6-6-6-4 syllables each
- rhymed L2 and L3 rhyme. Often internal rhyme is employed. End rhyme scheme x a a x , x being unrhymed.
ooo I love the word you used as a title. Excellent and deep poem!
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yay! thank you dear! ❤
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You’re welcome 🙂
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What a comparison! Great job, Rosema!!
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yay! thank you, Jade!
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Excellent! I can feel this imagery!
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awww. thank you, Gilda! 😀
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My pleasure!
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Love the name of this. I can imagine looking down in this large crater in the earth. And you are very right when you right, “no time can heal.” Yeah, it’s a scar in the earth forever; fascinating cause we know so little about why some hit earth with such force, and others burn up. Great poem!
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Wow! That was one epic comment, Mandi! Thank you for the opportunity to have it. 🙂 ❤
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Fantastic title, sister! The work is cynical and poetic, as the form allows. It has a kind of worn-out sadness that, too, “no time can heal.”
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Yes, brother! I am glad the worn-out sadness was tangible. Thank you!
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Oh wowza wowza whoo! You’ve outdone yourself, Rosey–I’m stunned at the heights you reach poetically…..(lying on floor semi-conscious) ❤
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Oh geez! Wake up! HAHAHA
Tahnk you dearest sister!!! ❤
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You’re most welcome ❤
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:):)
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🙂
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Sad. Well written
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Thank you, Andrew!
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