Refreshed View: A Lune

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Refreshed View: A Lune

Your sudden goodbye
killed old ‘I’,
cleansed me and my eye.

©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.

Photo credit: Kantemir Kertiev


In response to Daily Post: Refresh and Napowrimo April 1, 2016.

Today, I challenge you to write a luneThis is a sort of English-language haiku. While the haiku is a three-line poem with a 5-7-5 syllable count, the lune is a three-line poem with a 5-3-5 syllable count.

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64 thoughts on “Refreshed View: A Lune

  1. Deep!! In just few words, you took me to the deepest thoughts, Rosema. Great take and I love your choice of image.

    And oh, I thought NaPoWriMo would be free of prompts. Haha. Guess, I’m off to think of a lune myself. 😀

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  2. You are an awesome writer. This captures the feelings from break up (sudden goodbye), to the process of moving on (killed old I), to being truly free (cleanse me and my eye). I would love to follow you and read your work in my newsfeed.

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    1. OH wow. You truly read between the lines of this poem . 🙂 Thank you Kristel Rose! 🙂

      I will do the same because you are an equally talented one. 🙂 And I am guessing with have another thing in common.. 🙂

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  3. Wow. I’ve had to read this a few times just to figure out how it’s making me feel. You’ve captured so much depth and emotion in just 3 little lines. And it’s equally pleasant to read (because of the similar sounds/rhymes) and melancholy. Well done, Rosema!

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