“As long as the waves still kiss the rock-shore,
surely as I can still love you more,
certain as the sun sets and rises,
I promise I’ll be back, dearest.”
His seven-year-old letter turned my heart as cold as the ocean breeze. I’m done hoping. I’m done believing. I crumpled his words, balled it up with my shaking fist, ready to throw, let go.
Then I heard his voice, followed by rushed steps, then a hug from the back. I tasted salty tears, of joy or of anger, I’m not sure. But I’m sure he smells and feels like this.
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Word count: 100 words
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
In response to Friday Fictioneers prompt for 20 May 2016.
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly writing challenge hosted by the generous Fairy Blog-Mother Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, where a photo is used as a prompt for a piece of fiction.
Beautiful poetry……
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Thank you for your lovely words!
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This is beautiful. 💕
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thank you very much, Sarah! Your comments are like little nuggets of gold for my heart. ❤
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Aw thank you! 😊
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i should thank you! 😀
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I just read Amy Reese’s story before this, and, you know, the two would make a perfect pair together.
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Oh. Thank you, Neil. Would you be fine to share me the link of the story? Or is it a novel? 🙂
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https://amyreesewrites.com/2016/05/26/a-greeting-friday-fictioneers/
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Thank you, Neil! 🙂
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Beautiful!
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Thank you, Nashrah! 🙂
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She waited for 7 long years! She’s incredible! I have no patience… Hahaha. I’ll surely give up after a year – the most! LOL! Great story! 😄
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Nyahahaha! Me too! 😀 😀 😀 I wouldn’t be waiting that long, too! 😀 😀 😀
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Oh! This is such an emotion filled one. Sadness, happiness, tears, joy, memories, anger… love really is a roller-coaster ride, isn’t it? 🙂 Sometimes, love last forever… 🙂
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Geeeeeez! Your comment brought me to joyride, too, NJ! 😀 😀 😀 Thank you!!!! And.. yes, some love lasts forever. 😀
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Yay! 🙂 ❤
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❤ ❤ ❤
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Poignant; the suddenly twist at the end makes the reader’s joy suddenly turn to sadness. Nice.
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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Thank you for your generous words! 🙂
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Awww, this is lovely!
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Yay! not as sad, right, PJ? 😀 THank you!
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Yes, not as sad!
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yay! thank you dear!
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Another beautiful story. You really know how to capture the sweetness of love 🙂
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Oh that is so sweet to hear, Jade! Thank you! 🙂
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Heart felt, with deep yearning.
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Thank you, Mandi! ❤ I am glad the yearning was clear! 🙂
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You’re so welcome 💕
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Did not expect the ending – tasting the salty tears of joy or anger – beautiful imagery either way!
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Thank you, dear! 😀
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Of course – you are so welcome 😉
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😀
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Great photo–and marvelous writing, Rose!
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you are never short of sweet words, my sister! ❤
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Such beautiful poetry. I don’t blame her for being upset. It’s hard to trust after waiting so long. But, oh the romance of it all. Surely, she must take a chance. Lovely story, Rose.
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That is so true. Waiting can really be tiring! Thank you, Amy!
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One small linguistic question — the last line, “he smell and feel like this” Are you using past tense or present tense? If it is present, it should be “he smells and feels.” If it is past tense, “he smelled and felt.” Other than that, you’re home free. 🙂
It’s a beautifully told story, Rose. And that poem at the beginning — wow! I love it! Very heartfelt. Right at the last moment he comes. Remarkable. My story had a similar story line only it was a little crazy. 😀
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Hi! Thank you for pointing my mistake, again! GEEEZ.. I should get my verbs straight from now on. -_-
And for your kind words, too! I will be reading your flawless work, soon!
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Hahaha! I have taught English as a second language to many people. Sometimes in the writing, things escape detection. But, the best thing to do is ALWAYS write! 🙂
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Thank you for you kind words! 😀 That is true, practice makes perfect, eh? 😀
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It does. And the best way to learn is simply to keep going. I speak Spanish and my first years were terrible. But, I kept going. YOU keep going! 🙂
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Okay! 🙂 I will! As long as my teacher, (who’s reading this right now) keep teaching me. 😉
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Awww. 🙂
Yes, and, seriously, if you need my help, please let me know. I’m always happy to help.
Remember: English isn’t complicated … our three year-olds speak it with no problem. 😀
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Thank you for saying that. 😀 I will try to remember that! 🙂
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That’s so beautiful and romantic. He has excellent timing. I like that she isn’t certain about her tears being from joy or anger, she has every right to be angry. And still have a happy ending. 🙂
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you are right! 🙂 She can be angry and happy at the same time. Love is that complicated. 🙂 Thank you!
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Awwee I’ve always loved your happy endings! And that poem is lovely too, heartfelt dear. ❤ ❤ ❤
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thank you, dear! she has waited so long so I would want to somehow give her a happy ending she deserves. 😀
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And a well deserved ending she had. You give justice to that dear. 🙂 🙂 😉
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Yay! thank you dearie! ❤
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