My rubber shoes are soaked with rain. My hungry stomach is now in pain. I was drowned in the sea of noise made of my schoolmates’ giggles and words shared with their friends and parents as well as the sound of the car tires against the water-kissed road.
The sun’s about to be eaten by the night sky but I promised to my once present father that I won’t ever cry.
So with my head bowed down, I repeat the chant my mind’s uttering for almost four hours now: “Mommy said she will come for me. Mommy said she will…”
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Word count: 100
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Jessica Haines
For Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) January 31, 2017. Congratulations for the 100th milestone, dear PJ!
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Oh my gosh, Rosey, this breaks my heart in 2!!! So good…but sooooo sad!
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awww. i agree. thank you sissy!
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You did a marvelous job with it!
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awww. thank you again sissy! ❤
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Most welcome 🙂
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Ohhh the poor thing… I do hope that mother turns up.
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aww. i hope so too. 😦 thank you dear Ameena!
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Very sad. God save all kids from hurt. Great take!
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awww. i agree. thank you! 🙂
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nice writing Rosema! I felt this child’s strength beyond her / his age in years.
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aww. i agree! thank you! 😀
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Awww, that is so sad and heart touching! What a wonderful story, Rosey! It really stirred up the emotions in me.
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awww. thank you so much, PJ! And congratulations to 100th FFfAW! ❤
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Thank you Rosey! Hard to believe That there has been 100 FFfAW challenges!
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yeah! time flies. 🙂
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Yes! It certainly does fly by! 🙂 🙂
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i agree! 😀
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❤ ❤ 😀
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Oh, wow, Rosema. This one made me well in tears. So very well expressed. 💜
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awww. thank you so much, Angela! ❤
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My pleasure. 💜
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❤
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Ooooh
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thank you, love! ❤
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The poor soul! 😦
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argh. i agree. thank you dear.
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You’re most welcome! 🙂
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❤
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Heartbreaking, beautifully written.
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awww. thank you!
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Excellent writing Rosema. I want to dive into the picture and make sure they get home safely.
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awww. that’s so sweet of you Davy! Thank you!
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Oh dear me! Poor baby
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aww. i agree. thank you dear!
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Oohh….and more ooohhhsss
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hehe. thank you! 😀
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This post packs a gut punch…ow!
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ouch. i agree. thank you, Lynn!
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Great piece of writing, Rose. So well portrayed!
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awww. thank you, Iris! 🙂
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My pleasure, Rose. 🙂
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The above comments say it all! Wonderfully heartbreaking!
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awww. thank you, S! ❤
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This is so sad! 😦 I want to go rescue that child!
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awww. i agree. thank you dear. ❤
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A sorry tale indeed. Sensitively written.
Click to read my story!
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thank you! 🙂
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I didn’t need my heart today – it broke for the poor thing! I hope the child’s mother comes soon.
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awww. that comment. 😀 thank youuu!
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Such a heartbreaker. Does Mommy ever come? I doubt he but maybe this gives him hope?
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aww. i hope she comes. 🙂 thank you, Mandi! 🙂
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Oh, poor baby. 4 hours and no mommy and NOBODY has comfort for him.
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yea. 😦 thank you for reading. 🙂
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Oh my. So sad…great job!
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oh wow. Thank you! ❤
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What a Chant is this…
Incredible!
Shiva
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wow. thank you, Shiva!
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