green thumb

BEFORE

voice can be
from the rolling of your
fearless tongue or from
the scribbling of your
shaky fingers. neither
is greater, as long
as they are yours.
yours. yours. from
the ripples of your
chest, their waves
can stir one heart
to move from the
dark west to a
brighter south.
because your
words are power.
you are.

AFTER

voice rolls like a red-
carpet tongue, plants
hope like a green-
thumbed gardener.
neither is greater, as
long as they are yours.
yours. yours. chest
ripples. stirring boats
of breath away from
the midnight west
towards the dawning
south. your words
are power. you are.

09.11.2020
©2020 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
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This work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivatives 4.0 International License.
For dVerse MTB, Write like a dog, edit like a cat…

19 thoughts on “green thumb”

  1. For me, the revision is a step up from the excellent before – the uncanny of ‘the red-carpet tongue’ ‘stirring boats of breath’ – these are intriguing images which work so well. Marvellous stuff and thank you for sharing this work.

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  2. I enjoyed both. Most enjoyed these words in the second one
    ” stirring boats
    of breath away from
    the midnight west
    towards the dawning”
    And as others have said, that red-carpet tongue…wow, I can picture that!

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