b o t t o m l e s s (a pantoum)

Sip those sunsets, time isn’t bottomless.
Let that cold wind kiss your deep dark tresses,
while your soul sinks with ‘nother day’s eggress.
Sshh, be still, as evening sky undresses.

Let that cold wind kiss your deep dark tresses.
Tired feet, be bare, let dusts be your toes guests.
Shh, be still, as evening sky undresses.
Solace’s not a clear map, it’s a wild quest.

Tired feet, be bare, let dusts be your toes guests,
tough, thick skin is formed with sharp thorns’ scratches.
Solace’s not a clear map, it’s a wild quest.
You’re never lost, this earth is your address.

Tough, thick skin is formed with sharp thorns’ scratches—
scars of blood-golds, only you can possess.
Yes, you’re never lost. This earth’s your address.
Sip those sunsets. Time isn’t bottomless.

03.18.2019
©2019 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo by Cristina Gottardi on Unsplash

Inspired by dVerse Poetry–a Piece of Written Art.
My second try on dear Gina’s of Singledust prompt:
*Pantoum
The pantoum is a poetic form derived from the pantun, a Malay verse form: specifically from the pantun berkait, a series of interwoven quatrains and rhyming couplets.
Basic structure
It is similar to a villanelle with repeating lines throughout the poem. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first.
The pattern continues for any number of stanzas, except for the final stanza, which differs in the repeating pattern.
The first and third lines of the last stanza are the second and fourth of the penultimate; the first line of the poem is the last line of the final stanza, and the third line of the first stanza is the second of the final.
Ideally, the meaning of lines shifts when they are repeated although the words remain exactly the same: this can be done by shifting punctuation, punning, or simply recontextualizing.
A four-stanza pantoum is common (although more may be used), and in the final stanza, lines one and three from the first stanza can be repeated, or new lines can be written.
The basic pantoum form is as follows:
Stanza 1
A
B
C
D
Stanza 2
B
E
D
F
Stanza 3
E
G
F
H
Stanza 4
G
C
H
A

23 thoughts on “b o t t o m l e s s (a pantoum)”

  1. Fascinating pantoum RW. Not certain I understood all of your meaning, but I felt there was victory overcoming a struggle. I found your comparing seeking the comfortof solace to a wild quest, which again pointed to struggle. Yhis drew me to read it a couple times.

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  2. Did you just write this now? In some 20 mins? God has blessed you with one of His most beautiful dimensions, i.e. Impeccable Art! Something else my beloved! Something else!
    And and, the composer in me already wants to hum this. I realize this has a metre to it, making it so lyrical.
    And and, this poem also makes me imagine our future days, hiking in the wilderness, embracing the uncertainties, getting bruised, getting healed, becoming better, and gulping down life’s experiences like a boss.
    Soooooooooo good, my talented Rosemarie!

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  3. your pantoum is like a play, it acts out all of life’s mundane activities with tiredness and even some boredom. i like the first and last line it ties the thoughts up together really well, nothing we do in between really matters as what we do at the end or rather when we are called to be brave. well done Rosie, a lovely attempt at an old form of ruminating thoughts.

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  4. This poem brings a lot of comfort and a will to overcome those sharp thorns:
    I specially like this line: You’re never lost, this earth is your address.
    Thanks for joining our Pantoum Poetry form.

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      1. Likewise, Rosema! You’re utmost welcome! I’m actually doing fine, thanks for asking. I look forward to catching up on the blogs I follow.

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