Faint, fainter, faintest,
goes the winky cars
passing by.
Dark, darker, darkest,
goes the moonless
November sky.
Soft, softer, softest
goes the notes
of lullaby.
Sleepy, sleepier, sleepiest,
goes the tired city
whisp’ring goodbye.
Soon, sooner, soonest,
I’ll be near,
as another day dies.
—
11.06.2018
©2018 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
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Written while listening to Sara Bareilles’ City as my heart yearns for my he.
For dVerse Quadrille Wink
oh such a romantic poem! waiting to be near again, love the start of each stanza – perfectly lovely in every way to express longing and praying for patience
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oh dear Gina. you make my heart smile. Thank you so so so much!
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Love this… what a wonderful form of going all superlative… .a night like this.
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ah yes. a night like that! ❤ thank you, Bjorn!
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Sooo romantic and the use of the degrees of comparison in this piece is so brilliant.
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awww. thank you sooo much dear Mich!
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I read it like a lullaby for a child…sweet and softly sung.
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awww. i am happy that it felt that way, Lynn! Gratitude!
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I love love love the first line of each stanza! So clever! I really like how it reveals different degrees.
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Yay! I am happy to hear that, Kira! Welcome to my virtual home! 🙂
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So soft and beautiful to read.
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Awww. Thank you so much, Diana!
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My pleasure, Rosema!
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❤ ❤ ❤
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I love the degrees in each stanza, specially the sweet last note. This reads beautifully tonight.
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Aww. Thank you dearly, Grace!
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I really like the way you structure this poem. Nicely done.
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Thank you so so so much, Arcadia Maria! I appreciate you!
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I like that soft lullaby.
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Thank you, Frank! 🙂
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I read this while the song was playing in the background and I was reduced to tears. They flowed out of the eyes as I sat in a corner table in a restaurant, trying to hide them from others. Maybe, I should have let others see the tears and then show the reason for them, your words. Your words, which are so powerful, that they can shake a person from inside, make even the hardest of rocks, melt and flow. You are an ace poetess. Salute, my love ;*
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awwww. thank you so so so much, my dearest. it makes my heart full to know how you can feel my word in ways that I wanted it to be felt. ❤ thank youuuuu!
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So romantic! I like the format of this poem. It fits quite well.
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thank you so much! I am happy you think so! ❤
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Oh WOW, Rosey–everything you write knocks me over!! ❤
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awwwww. Thank you so so so much, sissy! ❤
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This was so lovely and romantic
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Thank you sooo much! Happy to see you here again! How have you been? 🙂
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Doing well. Travelling quite a bit. Thanks for asking.
How are you?
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Enjoy the travels! Im doing good. Lots of things happening. Life. 😂
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You can feel the longing in this, Rosema. So melancholy but lovely.
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awwww. i am happy to felt it. thank you, dearie! ❤
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Hi there! I enjoyed reading your poem here, it was well written… and I loved the increasing degrees of repetition, worked very effectively… 🙂
…rob from Image & Verse
My “wink”
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Thank you so much, Rob, for noticing the tiny bits of technique I tried. 🙂
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