One…
two…
three…
what is there
for you to see?
Will there be
a bubbly bee—
bringer of
positivity,
yet with bite,
oh, so feisty.
Four…
five…
six…
what is there
for you to seek?
Is there a
bullet-size hole
where some light
will somehow leak—
to free the words
you cannot speak?
Seven…
eight…
nine…
Moving forward
is divine; giving up
is a landmine.
Once you step
on it— boom!
…
…
…
All is gone.
Your remnants
will then
go back to one.
—
Oh I love this!
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Aww. Thank you, love! Happy to see you here where it all started. 😊
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Always, love. I’m trying to be more present here
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Me, too. Slowly. 🙂
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I understand.
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Hugs. Hugs.
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The cascade of your words. It’s beautiful.
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Awww. So as yours, dearie! Thank youuuuu
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Ooh, it read like a skipping rhyme and then suddenly went dark. Mind you, so many children’s rhymes do. I love the rhythm of this, it just flows along beautifully.
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Oh yessss. Even sweet fairytales have dark roots, I have read. Thank you for such kind words, Sarah!
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Nice use of ellipses and em-dashes.
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Thank you, Frank!
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I like this! The punctuation actually serves a purpose the way you’ve used it. Well done. I think you cracked the meaning of the prompt!
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Oh I am delighted to read your words, Jane! Thank you so much!
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My pleasure 🙂
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In these numerals , you have defined the whole essence of life! Love this poem.
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Oh what a beautifully written comment. I appreciate you! 🙂
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Someone is on a roll! The way the words flowed in it are insanely commendable. And even more commendable is how you thought it all. Your brain is something else. Actually, I feel these are not products of the brain. Art comes directly from God, and this is God Himself doing the honors through you. Cannot be more prouder
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This is what happens when words keep your crazy heart with company. 🙂 Thank you so much for taking some time to read and feel my poetry. Gratitude!
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They indeed require a dedicated time slot to relish. That’s the level of your writing
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Thank you so much, my beloved!
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Interesting – from bees to bullet holes to landmines. There is story lurking nearby.
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Oh thank you, Ma’am!
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Exactly this is the way I want it to be used, love the way you wrote it almost starting as a nursery rhyme with both the counting and the rhymes. I think the movement in the poem is a great way to show the movement needed. Sometimes there is just no way back.
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Oh my poet heart is extra bigger tonight. Thank you so much, Bjorn!
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I love how you used punctuation in this piece!
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Awww. Thank you, Diana!
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You’re welcome, dear!
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😊
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Very playful as it tumbles along.
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Aww. Thank you, Bekkie!
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I like the counting of numbers and use of punctuations. I think we all go back to one.
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Yes. There is no other way. Thank you, Grace!
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This was a good write. A pleasure to read.
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Oh. Thank you, Andrew!
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Wonderful writing. It’s like a children’s chant and game, but the ending and true message is grim, but maybe the children don’t know that. Like Ring around the Rose. Or Dr Seuss turned upside down. Great stuff.
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Ohhhhhh. That’s so insightful. Thank you so much, Mandi! 😘
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You’re most welcome 💕
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😘😘😘
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