the thing about sadness is
it’s like a thick rain cloud
clogged inside your throat
blocking your breath,
your words,
even your screams.
you want to melt it,
get rid of it,
but it becomes bigger and bigger
choking you further and further.
but the thing about sadness is
when you finally surrender and bask
on its harsh downpour,
its painful drops
will help you grow,
will help you rise,
will help you heal, until
the suffocating cloud
finally bowed, finally bowed.
and the thing about sadness
being a dark rain cloud is it’s
living in a fading permanence.
it will pass.
it will fade.
but you, you are the sometimes defeated
yet always fighting sun.
you will rise again and again,
until no cloud of pain remains.
until no cloud of pain remains.
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P.S. This is the poem I mentioned to you, Ameena. 🙂
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05.06.2017
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In response to Poetics: Poems that could save your life by kim881.
The challenge is to write a poem to save someone’s life on one of the following themes:
apologies – bad hair day – bereavement – big decision – birthday blues – career crisis – commitment problems – divorce – does my bottom look big in this? – don’t let the bastards get you down – first date – first wrinkle – friendship – getting married – hangover – illness – insomnia – is this relationship going anywhere? – is this the real thing? – Monday morning – money worries – moving house – parenthood – playing away – retail therapy – rock bottom – stressed out – successfully single – when your lover has gone
FANTASTIC use of repetition. This is wonderful.
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yay! thank you, De! The prompt you have is so inspiring. I hope our poems do save lives. 🙂
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‘it will pass.
it will fade.’ – i like this. thanks!
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thank you! 🙂
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The end is superb. Good poem. Liked it. 👍☺️
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“it will pass.
it will fade”
Amen! Love every line, dearie… ❤
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This is just beautiful. I especially loved the ending.😊
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Wow that’s a great poem. Sadness is like a thick rain cloud clogged inside your throat. And it will fade and pass. Very well written, Rosema! 😊👍
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This is a wonderful poem, the last repeated lines carry such a great reassurance. Just let it rain…
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yes. let it rain. thank you, Bjorn!
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Beautiful play up of words Rosie…
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thank you, Mich! 🙂
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Nothing is permanent. Nor is pain. It will definitely pass away.
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amen! i cannot agree more. thank you sweetie love. ❤
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You are most welcome, my dear ❤
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❤ ❤ ❤
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“it will pass.” It always does. Lovely.
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yes indeed, Ma’am. Thank you! 🙂
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Beautifully done and you’ve risen to the prompt and beyond. What a way to describe sadness: ‘like a thick rain cloud / clogged inside your throat’ and the repetition of ‘bigger’ and ‘further’ creates the feeling of expansion. And then it rains: ‘it will pass. / it will fade…until no cloud of pain remains’. Sweet as the patter of raindrops. I’m ready to go out and face the day now. Thank you 🙂
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oh wow. your comment elated me, Ms. Kim. I appreciate the parts you highlighted. i love them equally. thank you so much again! 🙂 thank you!
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Beautiful Rosema. These words shine a light in the darkness.
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awww. thank you, Davy!
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I liked your description of sadness as a “fading permanence”. It only seems permanent.
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About walking through the valley and surviving, obviously written by someone who’s been there. Eloquent, touching, honest.
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“,,,sadness…living in a fading permanence.” Just wonderful! And I love your use of repetition. It soothed me.
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aww. thank you, Sarah! 🙂
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What an amazing image to connect with pain…….this is stunning!
I especially loved the third stanza. Just a beautiful write!
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awww. thank you, Lillian! 🙂 i appreciate you!
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I know that feeling all too well. I love the consistency of the imagery, the idea of pain and sadness choking you.
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thank you, Marina. it felt like that.
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clouds, darkness, pain all steps to knowing ourselves better and receive true healing. you wrote the feelings with such precision my dear. This is your forte!
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oh i cannot agree more. that is how we heal. 🙂 and thankyou dear Gina. i have been writing myself lately. 🙂
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we need to write from that feeling Rose, no other way for me, always start with a feeling, on the day that it is right to say it.
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yes i agree. i think it is always the feelings.
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so true – my dear!
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Ohhhh Rosema, a stunning piece. I love he journey of how the sadness captures us, sometimes kick us down but we still rise back up and conquer it. Love your hopeful tone. Thank you for sharing it
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thank you dear Ameena! got to share it here so you can read it. 🙂
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wonderful piece Rosema
glad to be reading your work again
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awww. i feel the same. thank you, Devereaux!
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🙂 anytime. I’ll be getting your book soon, too.
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oh wow! really? wow. thank you!
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Of course! You’re amazing 🙂
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so are you!
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🙂
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Such good truth–LOVELY
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oh my sissy love! ❤ ❤ ❤
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❤
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