Tense and stiff bodies
Heartbeats racing frantically
Choking in air begging for release
As if screaming can give ease
To souls being pulled
Up, up, up
Helplessly hanging
High, high, high
Then came the
sudden stop.
Oh, we reached
the utmost top.
*Ding*
The rolling began.
Gravity, here we come.
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P.S. I am too scaredy cat to try roller coaster but it fascinates me to watch the one in Enchanted Kingdom which starts with the pulling of the passengers to the top, like ever slowly. Then after it reached the top, you will hear a *ding* and then the hellish rolling begins. 😀
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03.15.2017
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Great description. 😊
P.S – I’m scared to get on a roller coaster too!
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thank youuu! and i will never dare. -_- haha
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Me too, Rosema 😊
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😀 😀 😀
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Yes – that moment before gravity pulls you is a moment of truth.
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i cannot agree more! 😀
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What an exciting ride… even if it’s in your words, Rose. Wonderful poem! 🙂
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awwwe. thank you, Iris!
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A pleasure, Rose. 🙂
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❤ ❤ ❤
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I wouldn’t go on one either 😁 Love the way you describe it though. I’ll settle for that.
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hehe. me too! (high five! :D)
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High five 😁
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Beautiful roller coaster poem rosema..☺
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aww. thank you Mich! ❤
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💕💕💕💕
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thank you, love! ❤
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Have been on one roller coaster, and that’s one too many, for me, thank you, very much. Only did it, because I was, with family, at the time.
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oh you are brave!
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Ding…the point of no return…no feeling quite like it.
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yes i agree! thank you, Paul!
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oh you do write quite the heart stopping ride Rosie dear! Loved the build up to the ding! and then the descent! I can take the going up but the coming down now that really scares me, lovely lovely words my dear!
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hehe. i cannot agree more! i cannot do this for real. 😀 😀 😀 Thank you, Gina!
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DING! Such a little word that starts it all in a cascading frenetic downward plunge! I think the most telling word is in your explanation: “hellish.” 🙂 So glad you posted for the prompt…and I love how the image rolls in your blog! Especially effective for this post!
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Hehe! thank you, Lill! I looove the prompt you gave so thank you for the inspiration! 🙂
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This poem gave me that feeling in the stomach Rosema. I hate the things and alway say to my daughter “if I was meant to fly I would have been a bat.” (she loves them). Great poem 🙂
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AHAHAHA! And i love those words too! HAHA! Thank you, Davy!
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🙂
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You are not alone. I’m afraid of roller coaster too.. 😂
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er. i cannot -_- HAHA
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My children used to tell me that I was supposed to scream on the ride to make it more enjoyable and we would sync the screaming at appropriate moments like when the speed increased. Generally I prefer being upside down and going fast than Ferris wheel slow but rocking way up high.
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oooh. nice. thank you for sharing. i prefer Ferris wheel. 😀
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Great roller coaster poem Rosey! I’m too scared to get on one too.
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hehe. thank you, PJ! I will never try!
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When I was younger I got on one and it was fun but I never would now. Especially because of how scary they have gotten.
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hehhe. you were brave!
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LOL! I wasn’t brave, I was stupid! LOL!!
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hahaha. nah. that’s brave!
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LOL! Okay — brave! 😀 😀
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😀 😀 😀
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Great poem!
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thank you dear!
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Most welcome! 🙂
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❤
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Love this, Rosema! Lovely description, could be a metaphor for many things!
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awww. i agree! thank you, Angela!
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My pleasure!
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You definitely took me for a ride in your poem , Rosema!
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hehe. glad to do just that, Jade! 😀
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Ohhhhh, I used to love the roller coaster and other rides when I was younger. I can’t stomach them anymore though. Hahaha 😂
By the way I just posted my first quadrille yesterday. 😘
Hop you’re having a great day.
💗
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hehe. even when i was young i was not able to tolerate them. haha. thank youuu, Staci! will jump soon!
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Hahaha. 🙂
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I love the build-up–perfectly capturing the anticipation, and a bit of anxiety, and then GOOOOO! Woosh!
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haha! woooosh! then dead. haha. Thank you, Lonna! ❤
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fun roller coaster poem. I love the “gravity here we come!”
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hehe. thank you! 🙂
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Only once did I ride a roller coaster. When it started the “hellish” downward race, my head snapped back and I had a stiff neck for days afterward! I’ve never felt the need to ride one again. You are not alone!
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hehe. i will never ever try one, Ma’am. 😀 thank you!
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I am scared!
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me too. 😀
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Do you ride, though? 🙂 I go woozy just looking at the roller coaster/ferris wheel go.
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Ferris Wheel is tolerable. Roller Coaster is naaaah! 😀
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Don’t be afraid! It’s all calculated fun by engineers who know what they’re doing. Still, I know what it’s like to be afraid of something. Not easy.
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yes i agree. thank you, Ma’am!
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…And I’m thirteen years old again! Great writing.
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yay! thank you, Martin!
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It sounds like your speaker doesn’t like going up high in very tall elevators. It can be a bit dizzying if they’re glass. But thank goodness it’s only an elevator and you can get out. At first I read and I thought oh she’s sky diving. Lol. Beautiful 🙂
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Oh I agree. I cannot even tolerate elevator. HAHA! 😀 😀 😀 Oooh. Can be sky diving, Mandi! 😀 😀 😀 Thank you!
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