One. Two. Three. Four.
His seven-decade-old hands hold tight on the rusting rails of his lightless room’s window. His darkened eyes stare at the now fallen tree and then to the triumphant men who successfully defeated the lush pine.
The lush pine planted and reared by his wife. His wife who died last month.
He slowly turns his tear-stained face away from the laughing men and the defeated tree as his old hand unlocked the drawer hiding his pistol. He reaches further for the bullets and slowly loads the gun.
With a dark smile, he whispers…
One. Two. Three. Four.
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Word count: 100
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Shivangi Singh
Here’s my dark comeback for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) January 17, 2017. 🙂 Miss you, PJ!
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Oh my. 💕
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aww. thank you, love! ❤
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Lovely parallel between the life of the tree and the old man. A tragic touching story.
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Thank you, Iain! 🙂
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Oh my Rosema! This is dark 🌑. What a sad tragedy
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yes. dark. 🙂 Thank you, Ameena! ❤
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Dark and sad but so touching at the same time, you managed to evoke so many emotions here. Well done Rosema!
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awww. thank you! ❤
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Dark and powerful Rosema. There are a number of endings here :0 An excellent piece to keep the mind occupied over the weekend.
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yay! thank you, Davy! 😀 i hope detective isn’t around. haha
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Always on the lookout Rosema 🙂
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haha! yea! 😀
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Wow! So chilling! His 70 year old hands are going to shoot them! Great story, Rosey!
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yay! you got it sooo right! ❤ ❤ ❤ thank you PJ! ❤
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So sad, yet beautifully written. ❤
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awww. thank you! ❤
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Most welcome, Rosema! 🙂
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aww. thank you! ❤
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Oh my, oh my–fiercely done, sister–a heart-wrencher!
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awww. thank you sister. ❤ ❤ ❤
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Most welcome, always and forever ❤
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Love you! ❤
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Love you too! ❤
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Well damn….great piece, Rosema
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thank you, Devereaux! ❤
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Anytime Rosema 🙂
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🙂
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Dark story indeed Rosema but well done! I felt like I was right there in the scene, looking out through the bars and hearing the bullets bang.
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oooh. wow.glad to made you feel that way dear! ❤
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A chilling piece Rosema!
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ooh. thank you, Mandi! ❤
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Welcome 🙂
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Oh dear! Sad fellow. What a chilling thriller.
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ooh. thank you dear Jacq! ❤
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A great piece Rosema, tragic ending, I just hope he didn’t.
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awww. thank you! 🙂
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