Summer Air

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The smiling sun and the jovial man-in-blue walking his black dog both fail to break the darkened state I am in after he left me broken and bruised.

So this is what first heartbreak feels like. T’was like a rollercoaster ride which pulls your heart up, up, up until it feels so heavenly and then bam! Dropped. Done. Dead.

I would be willing to take any road to find my way back to him, but then, but then, we’ve never been.

Our story’s like the summer air. You can feel it, but it’s not even there in the first place.

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Word count: 100
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Louise of The Storyteller’s Abode

In response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) October 18, 2016.

Rules:

  • a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less)
  • each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end
  • no serial (continuation) stories
  • include a pingback to the challenge post

Thank you for hosting this awesome prompt, Priceless Joy! ❤ 

Read more short stories here:

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44 thoughts on “Summer Air”

  5. Wonderful story Rosey! It really does describe heartbreak very well! I hope you are doing okay as I read this morning that a Cat 5 typhoon is headed toward the Philippines. I sure hope it doesn’t effect you or Maria!

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  8. Your story just comes alive! The paragraph that begins with “So this is what first heartbreak feels like…” definitely feels like a rollercoaster, with your use of repetitive words and alliteration. I felt like I was going up and then came crashing down as I made my way through that paragraph.

    My favorite line is the last one though, about summer air! Reminiscent of Nicholas Spark’s A Walk To Remember where he describes their love as the wind. Just lovely, Rosema ❤

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  15. Interesting Rosema. I think he raped her, but maybe it wasn’t rape completely? Maybe she had a crush on him from a far. I’m not sure but your line about them being like summer air, felt but not there was really brilliant.

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    1. thank you dear Mandi! each reader is a writer and it is interesting how you read this one my dear. ❤ ❤ ❤ and it is like a first love without the label. like in our language it's called M.U. magulong usapan. HAHA. no concrete relationship but you somehow like each other… 🙂

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