Sun’s savory
sunset and sunrise,
have inspired poets,
artists, painters.
But they cannot
beat you, darling
for musing my mind.
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Photo credit: Unsplash
In response to OctPoWriMo 2016 by Morgan Dragonwillow‘s Day 17.
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Shanzi is an invented verse form created by Andreas Gripp of London Ontario and found on Lawrencealot’s blog. The form is a kind of expanded haiku.
The Shanzi is:
- A verse form written in 7 lines, 2 uneven couplets followed by a tercet,
- Syllabic, 4-5 / 5-4 / 4-4-5 syllables per line.
- Unrhymed.
- Constructed with:
- L1-L2 Introduce the subject
- L3-L4 “amplifies” the image or subject.
- L5-L7 provide a parallel image to inspire meditation.
- Title at the discretion of the poet.
Oooh, this is lovely!
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awww. thank you, love! ❤
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Oh oh oh–I LOVE this, both the new (to me) form which I’ll try later…and your always wonderful words!
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awwwwwww. glad to know sisssy!!!
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Always! ❤
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yes. ❤ ❤ ❤
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❤
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Ohhhhh…really nothing beats you my love….
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awwwww. you are just the sweetest my dear Mich!! 😀 😀 😀
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Ahhh i am happy to hear from you..
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me too! ❤ ❤ ❤
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A good Shanzi Rosema. There is a sense of irony in the final verse. It can be construed as comedic and at the same time romantic (or tragic). Have a great week 🙂
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oooh. very good analysis, Detective Davy ! Thank you!
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Reblogged this on Creative Writing Reblogged.
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thank you for the reblog, Joe!
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Anytime!
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❤
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Yassss Rosema!
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YAY! Thank you dear!
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🙂
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Really lovely! 🙂
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awww. thank you, Saima! ❤
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Beautiful verses
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awww. thank you dear Mel!
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You’re welcome 😊
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❤ ❤ ❤
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The speaker in the poem has a pleasant preoccupation. The “s” sounds throughout interweave and strengthen the message. Tuneful work, sister!
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tuneful! what a beautiful word, brother! thank you!
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It’s a beautiful quality that your work has, sister.
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