Dense, wild forest witnessed the
tale of one unfolded chair,
a tired man with graying hair,
a final note, a gun fired.
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Photo credit: Unsplash
In response to OctPoWriMo 2016 by Morgan Dragonwillow‘s Day 10.
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Ushnik (God of Wind orignating from the hairs of the body of the almighty Prajāpati) is a stanzaic Vedic meter. The 7th horse pulling the golden chariot of the sun god is named for this meter.
The defining features of the Ushnik are:
- stanziac, any number of quatrains, 4 padas or lines.
- syllabic, lines of 7 syllable each.
Oh my gosh! Such a beautiful poem/scene till the final line…
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awwww. thank you, dear sister!
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Most welcome–hope you’re well ❤
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just busy sister. sorry haven’t email you lately. ❤
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No worries–maybe next week, or the next 🙂 ❤
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yes dear. ❤ love you. please know i am always thinking of you. i am just going through something. i will be fine. ❤
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You will be MORE than fine–you are fierce and fearless 🙂 ❤
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The only witnesses were trees. Better than an empty, arid room, I guess. Still, lonely and sad last moments. This is affecting work, sister.
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oh. great perspective brother. thank you! 🙂
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This is wonderful!
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awww. you are always sweet. 😀
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😊😊😊
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❤ ❤
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You seemed to have the habit of killing your characters lately rose…but i love the way you killed them lol…
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HAHAHAHAHAH! uhm. do i have to hide now? haha
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Hahaha…don’t i enjoy you killing…
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hahahah. i don’t know if that is good or bad, Mich. HAHA. Thank you! ❤
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Hahahaha regardless of…you killed them gracefully..
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haha. thank you dear Mich! 😀
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EERIE! That’s one body bag on a Monday, dearie. XD
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HAHAHAHA! yeah. i think i have to hide now.
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Umi-EJK ka lately nga. Hahahaha!
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Luh!! KAsiiiii. naapektuhan na ata ako!!! AHAHA
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Ingat-ingat din… baka magkatotoo, dearie! XD
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kenat be! takot sa dugo ang lola mo. haha
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IRONIC!! Hahaha. For someone who writes too much bloody scenes, dearie.
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oo haha. diba? hahaha. napupulot ko lang yan sa mga mystery and crime books!
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Haha! Sya nga 😂👏
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An excellent, deep and dark poem Rosema. I’m putting you down as a witness to this one, and not a suspect 🙂
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sigh of relief. Good to know, Detective Davy! 😀
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Great poem!
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thank you my dear! When will you post the FFfAW? 😀 I kind of miss it. 😀
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I posted it (FFfAW challenge) yesterday afternoon.
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just saw it. 😀 😀 😀
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Nice work!
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thank you, Muse! 🙂
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You’re welcome.
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and the death toll rises… 😉 This paints quite a scene in so few words. Bravo!
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oooh. thank you dear Mel!
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You’re welcome 🙂
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Ouch sad one! In death alone.
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i agree. 😦
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