This is the first part of a three-part series.
Buses are not just full, they are jam-packed during Mondays.
I have accepted wholeheartedly that I’ll be standing for almost two hours when I took the bus to get to work. Trying as hard as I can, I eagerly squeezed in myself in the already filled bus.
I heaved a sigh of relief when I finally stood in my little corner.
It was when a man seated in my front left stood. I am too amazed to react because hey, gentlemen are now as rare as a pink diamond!
He touched my arm softly to get my attention.
“Oh,” I quietly said as I look at him. (He’s surely flashing his pearly whites.)
I took his former seat, slowly.
When I looked up, it appears he’s looking at me too.
He smiled.
I smiled back.
“Thank you,” I said softly.
…
And that’s the start of our story.
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01.08.2016
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer
aww what a gentlemen! They are out there.
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awww. a few i guess? 😀
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yes ma’am 😉
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😀
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An intriguing adventure on a bus Rosema. Looking forward to part 2.
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yay! thank you, Davy!
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Hmmm a slow, easy start to a series. It definitely does the job in starting the story and making me wonder what’s next!
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oh wow. thank you, Jade! 🙂 This isn’t suppose to be a series but a lot asked for more when it is first posted. ❤
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I am anxious to read the next installment of this story, Rose. Great start!
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awwww. thank you! It will be up soon! 😀
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What a gentleman!
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i agree! a rare one! 😀
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Off to a great start, sister. I especially like the crafting of this action: “I took his former seat, slowly.” I look forward to what’s next!
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awwww. thank you, brother! 😀 your support means a looot to me! 😀
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Oh wow.
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yay! 😀
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A budding little romance…?
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yeah… we’ll see? 😀
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Oh wowwww–it’s so true that gentlemen are rare as pink diamonds–an experience such as you describe can practically make me faint!
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awww. yeah! I agree! ME too! HAHA
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🙂 🙂
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Nice introduction, looking forward to more!
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aww. thanks, Mandi!
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The tension here is so great, I love the detailed description of such a small act, it’s so powerful. I’m just starting up a new writing blog myself if you wouldn’t mind giving it a look 🙂
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Oh thank you for sharing your insights. Of course, I’ll be there. 🙂
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The start of our story.. 🙂 I’m so ready for part 2! Good start Marie. 😉
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awww. thank you dear! the second part is coming!
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You’re welcome! Can’t wait!
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yay! 😀
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Wow, is there any continues story of this? Hahaha
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yes! two more parts. 😀
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What a way to start a story. Beautiful.
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oh wow. thank you!
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You’re welcome Marie.
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❤
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I enjoyed this story but got a little bit confused because you kept changing tenses!! It might work a bit better to stick with past tense rather than flicking between past and present a bit 🙂 Otherwise, good work!
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Hi! Thank you for such insightful comment. I re-read and found the inconsistencies you mentioned. I stick with the past now. 🙂 Thank you! 🙂 Tenses are not my friends yet. HAHA
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Haha tenses are a tough gig! Not a problem at all – it’s always hard to comment and hope that the person won’t be offended, so I’m really relieved you took it the way I intended it (positively!). Good job again 🙂
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Hi Ms. Anna! I am not offended, I am actually honored that a writer like you (i visited your own page :D) took some of her precious time to read and comment in this piece. Aside from that, I really prefer honesty instead of flattery. I appreciate readers who point out my mistake because i get better through those kind of comments. Thank you again! 🙂
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I’m glad to hear it! And thanks for the compliment 🙂 I’m looking forward to reading some more of your work 🙂
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thank you! 🙂 I am littering some words of mine in your space too! 🙂
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Chivalry is a lost art. What a sweetheart he is. I hope he’s not a serial killer? 😉 (Heading over to part duex)
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HAHA! Well I can confidently say he is not! HAHA
Thanks, dear!
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