“That’s your daddy, little man!”
My mom-heart swells when the eyes of my four-year old sparked in delight as he watched his father fly the red helicopter for the first time. From playing toy planes, now my beloved husband is flying his real one.
“Let’s go, Momma! Come on!!!” he giddily say as he pulled me towards our condo’s door where we gaze at the lovely, exciting scene.
“Not yet love, it’s not safe—.”
A loud ear-shattering blast. We looked up.
My son’s delighted eyes turned to widely horrified.
“Moooooom!!”
“No. No. It’s not your daddy. It cannot. I cannot be.”
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Word count: 100
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Iain Kelly
In response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) August 30, 2016.
Rules:
- a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less)
- each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end
- no serial (continuation) stories
- include a pingback to the challenge post
Thank you for hosting this awesome prompt, Priceless Joy!
How sad that the helicopter exploded and especially with his wife and son looking on! Great story with a tragic ending!
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Yay! Thank you dear PJ!!! Morbid again, eh? HAHA
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Hahahaha! Sad would probably be a better word??
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yeah. but I am guilty this is morbid. HAHA
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Yes, it is! Hahahaha! Can you imagine being the little boy and seeing your father being blown up? YIKES!
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YEAH! That’s morbid!!! -_- (i’m sorry little boy.)
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Hahahaha! You crack me up! That was nice of you to apologize to the little boy for writing his story so morbid. 😀 😀
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HAHA. Yeah. That’s was I can only do! His fate was written by a morbid one. 😀
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Hahahaha! Poor little boy. Rosey wrote his fate. LOL!
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HAHAHA! Thank you for the laughter, PJ! Too mean to write someone’s fate for real! HAHA
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Hahahaha! No kidding! 😀 😀
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YEAH! 😀
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Woah! This ending just pricked my heart even though my head knows that it’s fiction.
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oh geez. sorry about that deare Jacq!
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Nicely done, Rose! You can certainly pack a lot of punch into 100 words! 😉
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YAY! Thank you dear! 😀
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Uh-uh… I think I should have stalked starting from your previous posts dearie, not this one. Haha. I wonder how many deaths did I miss..? XD
Poor boy… BUT I’d like to think that the pilot managed to eject right before the explosion. *fingers crossed*
P.S. You may want to adjust some tenses in your 2nd and 3rd para, dearie. Other than that, this is great! *kisses*
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YEAH! THis is my latest morbid tale after cheesy ones! HAHA
I think you did not miss any deaths! 😀
P.S.
Got it dearie. Not sure if my verbs are good now, though. Hirap! HAHA 😀
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Yes, I just came from surfing in the waves of your cheesy poems. ❤ Glad I did not miss any deaths. I still have the body bags with me, you know. XD
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HAHA! Girl scout!!! 😀 😀 😀
Thank you for reading them all! Geez. Sana hindi ka nastress!!!
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Of course not! I enjoyed reading them. 😀
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awww. you, dearie!
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Excellent. From the first line I had a bad feeling for Daddy….
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yeah. there is something in this photo… 🙂
Thank you, Iain!
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I love the change of emotions in so few words. Nice piece of flash fiction, Rosema 🙂
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oh wow. you are too kind, Davy! thank you!
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WHY?! That’s impressively tragic. My heart is so heavy for him and his family. Excellent, but sad, story.
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oh wow. thank you very much! ❤
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Ugh. I just read it again and had the same reaction. Actually, knowing what was coming made it worse. Very memorable story.
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Awww. thank you Izzy! YOu are too kind. ❤
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Oh nooo are we back to killing off characters?! And I was just getting cozy with all the romance on your blog lately, Rosema LOL. It does say something about your talent when you can write both sweet romance and morbid deaths equally well ❤
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HAHAHA! Yeah! That is why! My dark-writer-self felt so defeated by my cheesy-writer-self so she went back and did a grim tale! HAHA Thank you dear Jade!!!
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And another body hits the floor… you weren’t kidding! What a tragic tale well told
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Yeah!! (I can imagine hearing the gong-sound in Hunger Games movie when someone dies. HAHA)
Thank you dear Mel!
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If you do that, your blog will chime so often, you could use it to tell time! You’re welcome.
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HAHAHAH! Thank you, Mel!
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You’re welcome 😉
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❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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Tragic, but well written.
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aww. thakn youuu!
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You’re welcome. ^.^
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Yay! ❤
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Tragic story that, really sad. But very well executed!
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oh thank you dear!
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I think Melinda is right, that’s another body on your body counter. Yikes! Great write!
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geez. got to plan an escape plan now. HAHA thanks, Mandi!
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Great story. You did well in the limited 100 word count form. Bravo.
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Well you are the master of twisted 100-word story, Drew! HAHA 😀 Thank you!
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How dramatic and sad! For a moment, I thought the little boy was on the helicopter. He wasn’t, so that’s something. With words in parameters–you don’t use many, after all–you accomplish so much, sister.
I’ve been off the mark for a few days due to finishing my summer term of teaching. It’s Saturday around 4:15 in the afternoon, and I’m pretty much done. Unfortunately, the word is out (because it’s true) that my school might be closing for good.
I heard on the news that there was an explosion in the Philippines, and the president is blaming it on terrorists. And turning the military out to do whatever he thinks they’re going to do. Though I also heard that the military can’t acknowledge that the bombing was connected to certain terrorists.
Sister, I hope you are safe. As always, you and yours are in my prayers.
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Oh brother. Sorry to hear about your school. 😦 I would like to ask why but it may be futile as I think the decision is final. What will be your next step then brother? I’ll pray for God’s knowledge and provision for you.
And yes, brother. 14 lives turned into part of terrorism’s statistics. Too bad. Too sad. It happened in Davao, the city where our current President was from. We’re significantly far but still the whole country is mourning and I think shaken. I wonder where is love amid this divide brother. Wondering and wondering. *sigh*
Thank you for the prayers.
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Sister, thank you so much for letting me know what’s been happening in your land. I appreciate the details, tragic as they are.
My school has been accused by the government of hoarding millions of dollars meant for student financial aid. Most of the campuses, such as my school, are not part of this, though the entire network is threatened with closure. I’m looking for new work in case we all get the word. Which does seem likely. The money the school should have is not there. Is it spent? Is it off-shore? At the moment (and until I suffer from not having a job), I’m more concerned about the students. They deserve to have a good experience in training for their respective work disciplines.
Thanks for your concern. I really appreciate that.
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Oh dear. I am so sorry to hear that. I’ll pray that you will land a job soon but most of all I’ll pray for the students who you are concerned about. You really have a heart of a mentor. 🙂 ❤
You're welcome, brother! Prayers for you, the school and the students.
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a four year old’s excitement and sudden shock…too much to handle….hot story………..but i hope all is well in the end.
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Thank you! Yes, there’s a chance that his dad survived. ❤
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oh good then , i sigh in relief…good story telling
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thank you dear Gina! 🙂
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My goodness! How horrible…but I liked it.
Ellespeth
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oh thank you, Ellespeth!
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Oh dear this is just sad.
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aww. i agree. thank you for reading!
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Wow.. can visualize it all – sad to do so though..but nicely worded! 🙂
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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You’re Welcome! 🙂
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❤
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