A frail, pellucid, deformed, indistinct, cylindrical jar
towering above unkempt, blotchy, matte drawer
sits silently among empty, hollow bottles.
Inside hides the ashen remains
of your once iridescent, glistening soul,
I still remember how I carefully pour
after I watch you burn in whole.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Unsplash
In response to dVerse‘s Quadrille #114 by Björn Rudberg (brudberg). Read his own jar-inspired poem titled Pickled Summer.
Also for Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie‘s Wordle Special Addition Sight “August 15th, 2016”.
Oh I love it… It’s like a jar turned urn almost.. Maybe we need to keep the ashes of our past too.
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Thank you, Bjorn! 🙂 It is my honor to have you here. 😀
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Oh wowowowowow. 💕 💕
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aww. that’s too much love, love! 😀
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😊😊💕
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Wow! Beautiful Quadrille! ❤
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thank you, Joss!
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You’re welcome! ❤
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Awww 😦 i love this!
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oh thank you, Christine. ❤
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Wonderful words Rosema. I love the contrast of wholeness and emptiness, in both life and death.
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ooh. thank you for noticing that Davy. 🙂
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A pleasure Rosema 🙂
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This is WOW. I love how it was written simple but left me in AWE.
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hey, you’re being too kind. 😉
Thank you! 😀
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Your welcome Rose😀
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Gosh ❤ this is so deep and beautifully emotive.. that last line left me breathless ❤ beautifully done.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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oh wooow. you are too kind, Sanaa! Thank you very much!!! ❤ ❤ ❤
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oh my what a dark poem and yet it’s so lovingly wrought. Wow my friend, wow.
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awwwwww. thank you for the WOW’s my dear Mel!!! 😀 😀 😀
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You’re welcome 😊
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Every adjective is so fitting, a part that makes a whole!
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oh wooow! I think the credit must go to MindLoveMisery Menagerie. 🙂
Thank you, Sonali!
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Wonderful! I love this piece.
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oh thank you dear! 😀 😀 😀
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You’re utmost welcome, Rosema. 🙂
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Amazing! ❤️
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awww. thank you, Momma! 😀
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Perfect.
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awwww. ❤
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Whew. I was delightfully all tangled up in all those adjectives, so did not see that ending coming. Wow.
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awww. thank youuuu! 😀
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I love this description of a cremation urn and the continuing of the poem to the end. Most excellent!
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Thank you very much! ❤
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I was mesmerized by this. So powerful in imagery and effect especially at the end…wow.
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wow. wow. so honored to read your kind words, Mish. Thank you!
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Beautifully fierce–more ‘wows’ from here!
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awww. thank you sister!!!!
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Most welcome always ❤
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Wow indeed. This poem pack a pretty good punch from beginning to end.
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wow. what a wonderful comment! Thank youuu!
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Awwee.. this is so deep, dearie! ❤
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awww. thank you dearie!
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Always a pleasure, dearieee!
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Kind of like Hamlet talking to the skull of Yorick. Only your verse is more visceral. Like what Melinda said, a dark and lovely poem, sister.
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wow! Hamlet, brother? Are you serious!! he is one epic character! 😀 😀 😀
Thank you very much!!!
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An artful, poetic consideration of loss. Hamlet, yes. It fits.
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oh brother. thank you!! *blush* *blush*
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Well, not only were the ashes kept but it seems there was someone watching the cremation too…a startling end…well done!
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yes. or maybe he cremated her on his own? 🙂
Thank you very much for reading! 😀
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Yes, maybe he did…yikes! You’re welcome too.
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Wow, a horror story in 44 words!
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ooooh. that’s a nice perspective! Thank you!
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Intense images, and eerie, too. I know the speaker loved and admired the deceased, did she kill him, too? 😱 In any case, beautiful writing here.
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Yes dear. He killed her.
You have keen reader eyes. 🙂 Thank you! 😍😍😍
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Ooh, such a visual. I’m at a loss for superlatives, and this certainly needs some, Rose!
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oh wow. that’s one sweet and just so kind comment, Walt! Thank you! ❤
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