Flatline

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Flatline: A Tho Nam Chu or Five Word Verse*

When your soul flies out
when your rhythmic heartbeats stop,
when your breath runs out,
please take me, with you.

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Word Inspiration: Sarah Doughty of Heartstring Eulogies (Thank you, Sarah!)


*Tho Nam Chu or Five Word Verse

Tho Nam Chu is:

  • stanzaic, written in any number of quatrains. It can also be written in octaves.
  • measured by number of words, 5 words per line.
  • tonal and end rhymed, end rhyme schem aaxa bbxb ccxc etc. x being unrhymed. When written in octaves the rhyme aaxaaaxa bbxbbbxb ect. The tonal scheme appears to be in alternating the flat and sharp sound in the 2nd and 4th words like the Tho Bon Chu.

49 thoughts on “Flatline”

  1. The love defies any boundaries, including death…Wanting to be together, even after death…. I guess that’s what you call, forever!
    Beautiful one, Rosema ❤

    P.S.: Tho Nam Chu is interesting! I am going to try this out soon 😀

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      1. Thank you, sissy! Mom is feeling better. Dad is better too but is complaining for another pain. Mom’s spirit is stronger, dad’s always the weaker.

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