Broken Quiedise

Broken Quiedise: A Pensee*

Your soul
breaks my robust chrysalis,
your fake radiance’s a bright beguile,
that killed my own guarded Quiedise**.

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In response to May Book Prompts –  by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.

Today’s prompt is Paradise Lost by John Milton, John Leonard.

Paradise Lost

The Pensee* found in the Caulkins Handbook stresses exact syllable count and strong end words. This invented verse form was first introduced by American poet and educator, Alice Spokes. It can be found on line at Instant Poetry Forms for Kids

The Pensee is:

  • a pentastich, a poem in 5 lines.
  • syllabic, 2-4-7-8-8 syllables per line.
  • unrhymed.
  • titled.

Quiedise is Carol of WritersDream9‘s made-up word for a quiet paradise. 

P.S. Thank you for letting me use that wonderful world, Carol. ❤


26 thoughts on “Broken Quiedise”

  1. It’s a beautiful word and you used it very well. Paradise Lost is very fascinating to read. My favourite passage I’ve shared is when Eve eats the forbidden fruit. Lovely poem.

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      1. I read a bit of PL now and then but not so much lately. I read it a few times in university but that was 9 years ago. I had an amazing prof teaching PL and other Renaissance Literature in my last year. It was my most favourite class. There is such connections btw PL, the history of the time, and religion here and now, not to mention philosophy. I guess I found it fascinating.

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