Our Ocean: An Onda Mel*
Salted wind in swollen seashore,
whispering shells,
singing bird’s bells,
seeping fine sand in my feet’s pores.
You came rushing, warned of a storm,
and then it came,
and end our lane,
wrecking our ocean, all it’s form.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Unsplash
In response to May Book Prompts – by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.
Today’s prompt is The Ocean at the End of the Lane by Neil Gaiman.
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The Onda Mel* is an invented verse form introduced by Renelda Gibson.
The Onda Mel is:
- an octastich, a poem in 8 lines made up of 2 quatrains.
- syllabic, 8-4-4-8-8-4-4-8 syllables per line.
- rhymed abbacddc.
Lovely again Rose. I do love the sea.
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Me too, Judy! I am a beach/sea junkie! 😀 Though I can’t wear two-piece bikinis! 😀
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Me neither! 🙂
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😀
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You are really great at these stuff 🙂
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that is so sweet of you to say, Jacq! ❤
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Beautiful poem–I love the ocean/sea, Rosey! And I love the photo so much. Have begun reading the book too 🙂
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Ooooh. that is nice to know my sister! I hope you will enjoy the dark and creepy novel of Gaiman.
And thank you for your kind words!! ❤
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Oooh, vivid and lovely!
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thank you, Sarah! 😀
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You’re welcome! 😊
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😀
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Such a thrilling poem!! Love it!!
Hugs sweet Ema!! ❤
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awww! Thank you, darling Dajena! 😀
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Wonderful!! 🙂
P.S.
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Alright! Thank you for sharing!
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Ooh! This paints a vivid picture 🙂
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Thank you dear NJ! ❤
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Wonderful, Rosey, but very sad.
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indeed PJ. I am really great in making people sad. -_-
❤ ❤ ❤
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No, usually you do just the opposite! Make people HAPPY! 😀
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haha! Really???? even with these sad stories? 😀
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Well… you have had a few sad stories! LOL!
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a lot, i guess! 😀
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Yes, now that I think about it, a lot!
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Yeah!! A looot! 😀 😀 😀
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LOL!!
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😀 😀 😀
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Usually, I read the text alone, then all your helpful notes. When I read the next-to-last line of your poem, I wondered if you were writing from (or about) The Ocean at the End of the Lane. A story I and my friends (here) have really enjoyed. I like the scene of your creating. Image of a “swollen” scene that promises to burst through as a raging storm. Like wiping out sandcastles, only here the “lane” of form and remembrance. Lovely, romantic work, Rosema!
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I think I am writing just inspired by the title but not about the book. 🙂 It is indeed a great read.
Thank you, Christopher! 🙂
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Your treatment of the title is certainly enough to create a haunting verse.
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Oh wow! Thank you! 😀
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Lovely and pictorial
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Thank you! 🙂
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I love this! Beautifully written!
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Yay! Thank you, Caitlin! 😀
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Wow! This is beautiful Rosema. I love the flow of your words. For a heartbreaking piece, very smoothly done, dear.
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yay! a smooth heartbreaking piece is such a love compliment, dearie! 😀
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You deserve it dear. ❤❤❤
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you are the sweetest!
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Just like you! :3
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aww 🙂
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I still need to read that book! Your poem just made me more interested in it! 🙂
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Ohhh. thank you! Though the poem is not that related to the book. 🙂 i just draw inspiration from the title. 🙂
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oh and what a brilliant job you did! You’re welcome 🙂
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you have a lovely night, dear Mel! ❤
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Thanks, I hope you had a lovely day 🙂
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i had a productive one. 😀
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me too! My apartment is much less cluttered–the middle anyway. The edges are still a mess but I’m slowly getting through it. My apt is small, so that doesn’t help.
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Oh geeez. I can’t imagine how do you declutter. Specially with the four seasons. Yet.. you go girl!
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it’s not easy. It involved a whole of…asking “am I going to use this?” Followed by head scratching and thoughts of various scenarios where I might need 4 ice scrapers. I could grow another pair of arms and then I’d need them, right?
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HAHAHA! I can relate! De-cluttering is not an easy task!
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No it’s not! But I have to do it. 🙂
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Yeah!!! So i’ll be here! Cheering for your de-cluttering! 😉
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Thank you 🙂 I’m going to tackle some more of that this weekend 🙂
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oh! so you’ll have another busy weekend…
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It’s a slow process. I try not to spend more than an hour or two each day on this otherwise I might go crazy.
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might go crazy and just throw everything you see? HAHA
Go, girl! 😀
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true though I am fighting that impulse. I didn’t get to do much sorting this weekend. Life had other plans. I ended up cooking for the week and working on my book.
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Ohh. Yeah. I am glad you just let it go. I mean you just do what you feel like doing. 😉
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🙂
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🙂
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