Bad Goodbye
You said it’s unintended farewell,
but your eyes shows you’re
lying, lying, lying.
You can’t even look straight to me,
as my tears starts
flowing, flowing, flowing.
As I try to keep
my broken heart
beating, beating, beating,
you closed the door,
and leave me with no air for
breathing, breathing, breathing.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
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In response to dVerse‘s Poetics: Unintended Farewell.
Coming to this week’s prompt – here is what I have in mind – I want you to write a poem about the farewell you gave but didn’t mean to – the good-bye you said but hoped that you will meet again at the crossroads. I know it happened to me before, more than once – that I got onto a train, waved my hands involuntarily, the people I left behind fading slowly and that only made me realize how strong the bond was. I hope you will enjoy writing this – come join me and celebrate poetry.
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thank you for the heart, ishita! 🙂
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Oh wow.
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Thank you, Sarah! 🙂
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😊 😊 😊
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Nice poetry and good use of repetition.
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Thank you, Rohit! ❤ ❤ ❤
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You’re welcome Rose 🙂
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Thank you, Rohit! 🙂
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You’re welcome 🙂
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Saying goodbye is not my forte.. I break down.. or I mummify not to let my tears fall, and as you said, count my heartbeats away..
❤ Love you!
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Oh me, too. My tears are shallow, they flow easily..
Love back to you, darling!
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🙂
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Awesome poem, but so sad!
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yes dear… farewells are mostly sad. Thank you! ❤
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this poem sounds like the refrain from a song, a somebody done me wrong song 🙂 Great job!
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yay! thank youuu, Mel! 😀 😀 😀 That repetition was inspired by a The Script song. 😀
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You’re welcome 🙂 Sounds like a good song
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yeah! 😀
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🙂
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Oh my! I’m collapsing with the heartbreak in this–WOWZA, Rosey.
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oh no. don’t collapse!!!
Thank you sister! 😀
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I’ve recovered somewhat now 😉
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haha! glad to know that! 😉
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:):)
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😦 No!! Don’t go!! Oh, the heartache 😦 I’m loving the prompts. Someday, I’m going to join them too. Hopefully sooner rather than later. They all sound super fun to write for! 🙂
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Awww, thank you for your comment, NJ! ❤ I might not be able to join them this month, but I would love to read yours, my dear! ❤
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Oh no! Why not? But, I guess, as long as you are writing and posting, I’m okay with that.
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The reason will be told soon. 🙂 Thank you, dear! 🙂
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Bad goodbye 😦 I also want to share that our D’verse OpenLinkNight is open, so feel free to link up this poem or any poem today until tomorrow ~
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Thank you Grace! I am sorry I am not usually online every weekend. I missed linking this up. 😦
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i read the first line and thought, that’s a lie. And then I read lying three times. The repetition, I think, builds toward repeated “breathing.” That’s how breathing goes–repeatedly (thankfully)–even when it’s labored, as it must be here. The last three lines in fact create a metaphoric scene in which emotional loss is tautly expressed. More moving work, Rosema!
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you got it so right at the beginning, Christopher! 🙂 Thank you very very much! 🙂 ❤
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I hope not too many people have to go through this terrible goodbye. Nothing hurts more than saying goodbye when all you ever wanted is to hold on. Another heartbreakingly beautiful piece, dear. </3
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Uy. Relate? 😀
Kidding aside. That is true. A goodbye is always not good. (as The Script said so.)
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HAHA! Slight? XD
Yep, true. But not all the time. There are good goodbyes in love too. ^^
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yeah! when it is not the right person, it’s good to say goodbye. 🙂
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