Death Spills: A Lai*
Twas a normal day
within blooming May
until
blue clouds turns to gray,
it’s too late to pray,
or kneel,
your soul flew away,
left bones to decay—
death spills.
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In response to May Book Prompts – by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.
Today’s prompt is The Lovely Bones by Alice Sebold.
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The Lai* is a short story in verse. In its strictest form it is a verse form with a rhymed syllabic pattern in three tercets.
The Lai as verse form is:
- a narrative, tells a story.
- usually a nonet, 9 lines made up of 3 tercets. It can be a hexastich made up of 2 tercets.(When written in 9 lines is can also be called a Bergerette or a Viralai stanza.)
- rhymed, rhyme scheme aab aab aab.
- syllabic, syllables per line are 5-5-2 5-5-2 5-5-2
- Tradition states that the short line must not be indented; it must be left dressed to the poem.
Wonderful as always!
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Thank you, Sarah! 😀
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How can something so grim sound beautiful? Excellent!
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aww! love love your comment, Jacq! 😀
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Oh WOWZA, Rosey! Brilliant, ever Brilliant! And by the way, have you seen the movie “The Lovely Bones”? Very creepy…
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Yay! Thank you sister Stella! I haven’t but I have read the book and I love it. It is creepy and dark too!
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Ahh, you’re more of a reader–I tend to watch movies (they’re quicker!) 🙂
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Yeah.. I am more of the reader because i believe novels are always better than their film versions. 😀
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I usually agree with that, though now and then the movies are equally good…and on rare occasions, better 🙂
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yeah. there are some rare occasions! 😀 😀 😀
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“Dolores Claiborne” was one, and also “The Shipping News”… PS: I picked up the book “Ocean at the End of the Lane” today, and was glad to see it’s short, so I should be able to actually finish it 🙂
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oooh. those will be noted! 😀
Really???? 😀 😀 😀 yes, it is short. 🙂 and dark, and mysterious. 😀
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I got a 2nd book while I was there–a novel called “Best Boy”, about an autistic man…it looks really interesting!
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oooh. that sounds interesting indeed! 😀
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Will report back…assuming I finish them both 🙂
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alright! 😀 😀 😀
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🙂
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❤
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Oh dear! Blue skies and colourful May turns into heartbreaking reality. I agree with Jacqueline, you tend to make the grim sound beautiful too! 🙂
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Awww. That means a lot my dear! ❤
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Beautiful rhyme and rhythm will definitely pass for a song there 😀
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Hi Oba! Thank you so much for reading! Your words mean so much to me. 🙂
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You are welcome my dear friend 😀
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Have a great week, my friend! 😀
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wonderful Rosey! : )
u r brilliant! : )
✌
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you are equally brilliant dear! 🙂
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Dark and delicious!
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yay! thank you, dear! 🙂
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You’re welcome, my sweet girl! And now please pen the next on our dear series. Let’s make it pretence this time
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Hi Nandita. Sorry. Today’s been a chaos. I will try to start tomorrow. Or you can start and I will follow. 🙂
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No no no Rose. You always start. Thats the deal!
Rosie has a little lamb, the lamb always follows. Lol
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okay. maybe tomorrow. sorry. been very busy. -_-
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Not a problem
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thanks, Nandita! 🙂
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Great poem! Wonderful book!
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Thank you very much, PJ! ❤
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xoxo
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❤ ❤ ❤
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It is too late, once the soul has flown away. We who are left can only mourn. Brilliant, verse-look at this, Rosema!
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That is so true, sadly sadly true.
Thank you, Christopher!
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“Death spills” and grief floods, what a dark poem you have here but it’s also lovely and haunting. A perfect tribute to a great book. 🙂
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Thank you very much! This is indeed an epic book! It haunted me. Haunted me so well! 😀
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Oh wow, sounds like a good book then!
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yeah… 😀 it’s creepy and epic!
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🙂 not a bad combo 🙂
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yeah! surely not! 😀
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🙂
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Read this book. It’s as interesting from the murdered girls view in heaven, as the book is off-putting and miserable for those she left behind on earth. Your poem is sad and matches the theme of the book well.
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Yay! I have read this book, Mandi! And it’s story stayed on my mind years after I finished it. It is indeed haunting.
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