And Then: A Haibun*
Cheers and squeals like flock of giddy birds bade goodbye to the newly weds. Hand on hand, he takes her to the restored Cadillac that took her to the church this morning. Twenty more minutes they’ll arrive in their home, amid winter’s rash cries their bodies will create warmth of their own. For the fifth time he kissed her soft yet with urgency, with eyes closed they were not able to see.
iced road cradles cars,
tires screech with blinding bright light,
and then there were none.
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In response to May Book Prompts – by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.
Today’s prompt is And Then There Were None by Agatha Christie.
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Haibun is a joining of prose and haiku. Originating in Japan, found as far back as the 10th century and made popular by Basho in the 17th century, it is autobiographic often taking the form of a travelogue. Modern haibun usually draws its inspiration from everyday events. The form usually opens with prose which is short narrative. It sets the scene or describes a specific moment in objective detail. The haiku that follows relates to the core of the prose bringing emotional insight through an intensified image. There can be one or more prose-haiku combinations.
- The prose describes in depth a scene or moment in a detached manner. It should be brief, concise and poetic. It is written in present tense and does not give away the moment of insight that should be revealed in the haiku that follows.
- The haiku should not be in direct relationship with the prose but bring a different slant to the images to heighten the emotion drawn from the defining moment of the prose revealed in the haiku. It should not repeat words or phrases from the prose.
Oh my gosh…oh my gosh…I can hardly stand it!
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geez. sorry my soul sister.
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Don’t be sorry–you write so well, and often catch me off guard 🙂
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yay. i am actually glad to know that! 😀
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Good, it’s true 🙂
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Such happiness, evidenced by “squeels and cheers” but the poems end is so final and cold. Well written. There is much emotion in this piece, from one end of the spectrum to the other. Really like the new blog. Great choice in theme and details.
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You captured it so well, Mandi!Thank you for affirming my goal. 🙂
And thank you for noticing the new look of my blog. ❤
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Beautiful!
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not dark? 😀
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Dark is also beautiful. You took a quick, unexpected turn, which is something I do sometimes, and I always find it interesting when that happens. Sorry I didn’t elaborate more. This migraine has me barely functioning. 💕
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And I adore how you do that. that’s one of you shining talent.
No worries. 🙂 You go and take some needed rest? ❤
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Yes, I’m off now. 💕
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Alright! 😀
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Oh! how sad. Ice can be so treacheaous! What images you paint!
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That is so true. In as much as I love winter it has some killing nature too. Thank you Indy!
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Oh how sad! The happy blissful newlyweds in car crash that killed them. 😦 It started so blissful and ended so bleak.
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yeah. -_- the prompt asked for it. sorry for breaking you heart again my dear.
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What a story, what a telling. Invulnerable newlyweds kiss and close eyes. Then something more invulnerable intervenes. Another well-crafted change, Ms. Christie!
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GEEZ! I could never be her, Christopher, yet your comment surely makes my heart dance! 😀 Thank you!
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Wha…?! Why oh why? Just when they were so happy 😦 But whoa! What a way to incorporate Agatha Christie’s book in there! That is just brilliant 🙂 ❤
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Sorry for the shock dear NJ. I think that Christie book calls for something dark, so there. 😀
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Awesome writing! 😀
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yay! thank you my friend! Isn’t it too dark? 😀
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oh no! Dead on their wedding day! How tragic 😦
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yeah. 😦
Ms. Christie’s book demands for something dark and this one is surely darkest of them all. -_-
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true but the book asked for it right? 😉
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yeah!!! it is one of the best creepiest book ever!! 😀
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I’ll have to read it sometime 🙂
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yes please. 😀
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🙂
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❤
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