Bittersweet Chocolate

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Bittersweet Chocolate: A Lyrette*

Melt me
with the warm
flow from the spring
of your beating heart,
take bitterness,
replace it with
sweet crumbs.

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Photo credit: PortlandFresh

In response to May Book Prompts –  by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.

Today’s prompt is Like Water for Chocolate by Laura Esquivel, Thomas Christensen (Goodreads Author) (Translator),Carol Christensen.

Like Water for Chocolate

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*The Lyrette is a syllabic invented verse form created by Dr. Israel Newman.

The Lyrette is:

  • a heptastich, a poem in 7 lines.
  • syllabic, 2-3-4-5-4-3-2 syllables per line.
  • unrhymed.
  • each line should end with strong word.

 

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59 thoughts on “Bittersweet Chocolate”

  1. Oh my, I’m swooning!! And a new form to try, great! Wonder if you could clarify what is meant by “strong” word? Is it the sound that should be strong, or the content–if I’m making any sense…? Thanks for any help you can offer 🙂

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  2. Have to agree with Stella… That opening line is enough to get anyone swooning 😉 Plus that picture is one of the most beautiful things I’ve seen all day. I really liked the line ‘take my bitterness’ as well, and the concept of a sweet relationship melting away the not-so-sweet aspects of a person’s day 🙂

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    1. Hi sweet Yusra! 🙂 Thank you very much for your sweet comment that got me swooning, too! 🙂 I admire how you ‘read between the lines’. 🙂 I believe you will be one of my favorite readers. ❤ 😉
      Thank youuu!

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  3. Now this poem is packed with chocolatey goodness! Melt me indeed. I love dark chocolate and these lines are the perfect tribute to it: “take my bitterness,
    replace it with
    sweet crumbs.”

    Oh yes. Bring on the chocolate! 🙂

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  5. I’m getting mine ready, and I reread yours to see if I was on the right track–looks like you have two lines with 5 syllables, instead of one…or am I miscounting the form? 🙂

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      1. No problem at all–mine will post tomorrow, but it’s no way near as gooood as yours. I’ll probably do more of them, as I have time–but yours is truly 5 Star!!

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  6. A gorgeous poem. Romance is flowing in your ink-quill beautiful lady!
    That is one great book. I have read it two times in Spanish. Great choice!
    Have a beautiful weekend!
    ~ Dajena 🙂

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  10. Pretty piece. I like the end all your speaker needs is “sweet crumbs” and that isnt’ very much at all to ask. But they mean a lot.

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  11. I keep meaning to say that the photographs you’ve been selecting to complement the poetry are great. Really clear and strong, evoking sensation.

    The poem (better than the photo, if you don’t mind) reads as a plaintive, reasonable plea. I like sweet chocolate through and through. Who doesn’t want life to be that sweet as well? Such is the plea so skillfully rendered here.

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    1. Thank you for you keen words for both the photo and the poem. And.. honestly, it is easier to write the poem than pick a photo. So thank you for affirming that I am choosing the right ones. 😉

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  12. *hunts desperately for some chocolate. Where are they? Where are they? My dear friend has written such a beautiful poem about it and I need to savour it even more with some yummy dark chocolate and make this day a lot more sweeter!* 😀 ❤

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