Midnight Sighs: A Waka*
Tender is the night
wordlessly bare and breathless
soft rugged rushed sighs
breaks velvet night’s masked silence—
‘til we said the last goodbyes.
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In response to May Book Prompts – by Sarah Doughty and MahWrites.
Today’s prompt is Tender Is the Night by F. Scott Fitzgerald.
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*Waka
The waka is:
- a pentastich, a poem written in 5 lines.
- syllabic, 5-7-5-7-7 syllables. 31 onji, in English, 31 syllables.
- true to the heart of the poet. The inspiration is to be drawn from the experience.
- an early model for the tanka and many other Japanese forms.
- gathered into collections. In most Japanese anthologies poems are arranged in seasonal sequence followed by considered, poetic-worthy topics such as love or grief.
Wow. Such passion! I’m going to stick with wow because this one deserves it! Wow!
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Geez! thank you for the wow! Got to imagine things through Christian Grey’s point of view. HAHA
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I’ve never read any of the fifty shades books and I don’t think I ever will, but you earned that wow! You’re welcome 🙂
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It isn’t good so I am glad you haven’t. I haven’t read them all. Just the third one and half of first book. It’s so hard to understand. Haha
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I hear you. I can’t understand that whole BDSM thing. Why would anyone want that kind of relationship? Not for me.
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EXACTLY. For me too. First it is gross and it is weird. I believe such act should be done in love, without the unnecessary ‘props’ and within the context of marriage. A lot might not agree with me but… that’s how i see it.
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Oooh, very nice!
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thank you, Sarah! 😀
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You’re welcome! 😊
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❤ ❤ ❤
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Oh my goodness, oh my goodness–this kills me with LOVE…sigh. You’re too good Rosey–and now I have a question: what’s the difference between a waka and a tanka, since the lines/syllables are the same? If you don’t have time to address this, it’s fine–I can Google at my leisure 🙂
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Geez. Thank you! Your poems made me feel the same, my M! 😀 😀 😀
And… you are right! They have the same number of lines and syllables. You have keen eye, my dear! I didn’t notice that! 😀
Hmmm. According to my references, Waka is the earliest form of Tanka. So I believe it’s like Waka is the mother and Tanka is its daughter. 😀
They differ in themes, a bit. Waka: true to the heart of the poet. The inspiration is to be drawn from the experience.
While Tanka: written as a personal or emotional expression of themes such as natural beauty, love, the impermanence of live, the activities of the common people.
🙂
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Thank you, always. xxoo
It sounds as though the 2 forms differ only slightly–I think that I tend to mix ingredients in much of my poetry: sometimes a poem about rain or a sunset includes my feeling about my ghost-love, or some other experience. So maybe I should just call mine Tankas, to be safe 🙂 Your Waka is so incredibly beautiful–I might be able to do a similar one…will ponder later… 🙂 xxoo
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I agree. I think there’s a fine line. And I tend to mix forms too! HAHA. So I am not sure if this one should be called Tanka or Waka because I have never experienced this, yet. 😀
I would love to read yours if ever your would want to write one! 🙂
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I’ll try to do one later–I’m fighting with my Microsoft Word program at the moment–growl-growl!
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Geeeez. Alright then dear. 😀 No rush, okay. 😀
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Don’t ya hate it when they’re asking you to do something you don’t really have to do?? I’m fine now…deep breaths and some ginger ale–“geez”! xxoo to you!
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Deep breaths. 🙂 ❤ ❤ ❤
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🙂
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❤
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[…] may qualify as a Waka—I’ll let Rosema be the judge…hers is […]
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geez! that was fast! 😀
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Lovely 🙂
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thank you! 🙂
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Beautiful poem, Rosey Rosema! 🙂
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Thank you PJ! 😀 😀 😀 Love the Rosey Rosema! 😀
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Oh good!! I think you are Rosey!
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Rosey is the nickname my Malaysian client has given me. So yeah, I can be Rosey! 😀
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Oh cool!! I will start calling your Rosey! I love that name!
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yay! go dear PJ! 😀 It will be my pleasure. ❤
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🙂 🙂 🙂 xoxox
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❤ ❤ ❤
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Passionate and silky! Loved it! You are an artist sweet Rosema!! ❤ ❤ Left me breathless!
P.S. LOVE the new face of the blog!! ❤ Dajena
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Coming from the Queen of Romanticism, it’s an honor. A huge honour I must say. ❤
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Thank you darling! Got to try a new theme and I liked it. I am glad you noticed. 😉
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Ohh, you are a talented young woman, yourself, and a queen of your own (or princess, I think we already established that hehehe) ❤ ❤ love to you!!
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yes dear, a princess. 😀 Thank you darling Dajena! ❤
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Oooh!!! Our Mr. Grey will definitely have morning sigh with this!! Hahaha. You’ve done very well dear. And I love the hind of longing and craving in this piece. ❤❤❤
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Geez. HAHa. Thank you, Maria! I am quite feeling weird of the two poems I written that’s so sensual. Boyfie asked if it was for him, HAHA! I said he is assuming! 😀 😀 😀
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Now THIS is kilig, my dear friend. Loved it. 🙂 ❤ ❤
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Geez. This is a Christian-Grey inspired kilig. HAHA. Thanks, my dearest Annie! 😀
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