Remember: A Rosemary*

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Remember: A Rosemary*

If you will ask my heart, it will tell you
All that she wants is to remember you

Your warm morning breath that whispers sweet words
they were never absent, not even once
each tickles, makes my heartbeat jump and dance
I wish I remember hearing your words

Your tender touch that calms weary mind
they’re like sunrays that wakes my soul alive
each caress quiets the monsters inside
I wish your touch’s mem’ries  stay on my mind.

I want to remember all about you,
I want nothing else but.. Wait. Who are you?

©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.

Photo credit: HD Wallpaper


In response to Napowrimo Day 29. (yes, I’m catching up! :D)

 

Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem based on things you remember. Try to focus on specific details, and don’t worry about whether the memories are of important events, or are connected to each other. You could start by adopting Brainard’s uniform habit of starting every line with “I remember,” and then you could either cut out all the instances of “I remember,” or leave them all in, or leave just a few in. At any rate, hopefully you’ll wind up with a poem that is heavy on concrete detail, and which uses that detail as its connective tissue.

*Rosemary (Yes! A poetic form that’s almost exactly my name! :D)

The Rosemary is an invented verse form that uses envelope quatrains. It was introduced by Viola Berg.

The Rosemary is:

  • a poem in 12 lines, made up of a rhymed couplet, 2 envelope quatrains followed by a rhymed couplet.
  • metric, iambic pentameter.
  • rhymed aabccbdeedff.
  • L4,L5 and L8,L9 are indented.

Read more of my Napowrimo 2016 poems here!

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41 thoughts on “Remember: A Rosemary*

      1. It’s cool that you have a poetry form so close to your name 🙂 I think I invented a form last year…but now I’ve forgotten what it was, and how it worked…dust bunnies in my old brain!!

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  1. Ooh…love that last line that turns the poem completely around. The whole time you think it’s a sweet love poem, and then that last time ends it on an almost chilling note.

    P.S. Almost done catching up, my dear! 🙂

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    1. Yay! Thank you very very much for your words, Jade! I am really fascinated on how you can read through my words. 🙂
      P.S.
      I noticed that and I cannot thank you enough! That is so much for you to do dear Jade! ❤ ❤ ❤

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  2. Whoa! The last line just twisted the entire plot completely!!! 😀
    A lovely one Rosema ❤
    I guess high time you invent a poetry which is named exactly after you .. 🙂 That would be quite exciting! 😉

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  3. Not sure where to begin. This is beyond beautiful from beginning to end. ❤❤❤ So heartfelt and calm yet it’s stirring and left one’s heart restless with that last line. Cleverly done. 🙂

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  4. Wow a poetic form named after you–that’s so awesome. It’s a lovely form for a lovely poetess 🙂 I love this envelope quatrain — “Your tender touch that calms weary mind
    they’re like sunrays that wakes my soul alive
    each caress quiets the monsters inside
    I wish your touch’s mem’ries stay on my mind.” I also love the term “envelope quatrain” that’s a new one for me. I’d never heard of it but now that I have, I like it a lot! 🙂

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    1. That is so true! I felt giddy when I found this form. It is almost my name which is Rosemarie. 😀
      Thank you very very much for quoting that part. I so love it too. 🙂

      And I would love to read an envelope quatrain from you, dear Mel. ❤

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      1. You’re welcome 🙂 One day you will read one from me. I don’t know when but eventually the pace will slacken and I’ll have time to devote to it. right now I’m just trying to keep up with everything.

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  5. Well, this works in layers. You write about remembrance and then undercut it. Rosemary is for remembrance, Ophelia observes (madly). You are Rosema(ry). Congratulations, Rosemary! You, unlike the speaker’s skill (or lack thereof) in your poem, shall be remembered.

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