Sweet Sun: A Scallop*
Sweet sun,
send me the moon.
Save soul slowly sinking,
steady sea I’m seeking,
where soul can soon
stay shun.
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In response to Daily Post: Scars and Napowrimo Day 25. (yes, I’m catching up! :D)
Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that begins with a line from a another poem (not necessarily the first one), but then goes elsewhere with it.
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The first two lines of this poem is from Sara Bareilles’ song: Send Me the Moon.
Darkness to light
Moved from day into night
To be near you
Still here I stand
I am sinking like sand
In your sea
Sweet sun
Send me the moon
Empty the skies out
Bringing me one step closer
To you
Send it soon
And I will breathe in, breathe out
‘Til you come in and out
Of view
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The Scallop is an invented stanzaic form written in sixains. It was created by Marie L Blanche Adams.
The Scallop is:
- stanzaic, written in any number of sixains.
- syllabic, 2-4-6-6-4-2 syllables per line.
- rhymed, rhyme scheme abccba deffed ghiihg etc.
The two lines at the center are climactic, expressing where I am and what I need (and what I’ll hopefully get in order to be saved). Lyrical work–I’m not surprised that another song is involved. I like that song. I like yours more.
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There are your lovely lovely lovely words, again! Thank you very much, Christopher. Sara has inspired a lot of poems and even fictions. She is a talented poetess, lyrical poetess. ❤
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love the alliteration, the form and lines 3&4–they are the perfect follow-up to Sara’s lines!
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Yay!! That means a lot. 🙂 I love Sara so much! She is a lyrical poetess… her lyrics are just… breathtakingly painful! 😀
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Yes they are 🙂 She is a talented songstress!
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I agreeeeee! 😀
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😀
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❤
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Have you seen her sing live??? 🙂
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No I’ve just heard her on the radio.
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Oh. 🙂 Alright. 🙂
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🙂
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❤
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A lovely song coupled with a beautiful poem. You and Sara could make a great team, Rosema! ❤ 😀
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YAAAY! Thank you very much!! I loooove her so much. ❤
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You do!! 😀 She’ll be proud if she knew for sure.
~Calling Sara, you have a fangirl here!!
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Geeez! I will faint with happiness IF she will notice me. 😀
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Hmm!! One of these days, she might notice and hear you dear. 😀
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that would be a DREAM COME TRUE Maria! 😀 😀 😀
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What a treat, this post is. A lovely song and a love poem. It’s like a 2-for-1 deal haha!
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YAY! Thank you for the very kind comment, Jade! Sara is a great poetess. Her songs inspired me a lot! ❤
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Beautiful!
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Thank you very much, dear PJ! ❤ ❤ ❤
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