Sweet Sun: A Scallop*


Sweet Sun: A Scallop*

Sweet sun,
send me the moon.
Save soul slowly sinking,
steady sea I’m seeking,
where soul can soon
stay shun.

©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.

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In response to Daily Post: Scars and Napowrimo Day 25. (yes, I’m catching up! :D)


Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that begins with a line from a another poem (not necessarily the first one), but then goes elsewhere with it.

The first two lines of this poem is from Sara Bareilles’ song: Send Me the Moon.


Darkness to light
Moved from day into night
To be near you
Still here I stand
I am sinking like sand
In your sea

Sweet sun
Send me the moon
Empty the skies out
Bringing me one step closer
To you
Send it soon
And I will breathe in, breathe out
‘Til you come in and out
Of view


The Scallop is an invented stanzaic form written in sixains. It was created by Marie L Blanche Adams.

The Scallop is:

  • stanzaic, written in any number of sixains.
  • syllabic, 2-4-6-6-4-2 syllables per line.
  • rhymed, rhyme scheme abccba deffed ghiihg etc.

Read more of my Napowrimo 2016 poems here!

24 thoughts on “Sweet Sun: A Scallop*”

  1. The two lines at the center are climactic, expressing where I am and what I need (and what I’ll hopefully get in order to be saved). Lyrical work–I’m not surprised that another song is involved. I like that song. I like yours more.

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    1. There are your lovely lovely lovely words, again! Thank you very much, Christopher. Sara has inspired a lot of poems and even fictions. She is a talented poetess, lyrical poetess. ❤


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