Left Behind: A Lanterne
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer
You
promised
f-o-r-e-v-e-r,
I thought it was
true.
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Photo credit: Jean Gerber
In response to Blogging from A to Z Challenge: L is for Lanterne.
The Lanterne is a shape poem, centered on the page to resemble the shape of a Japanese lantern. It originated as a nature poem, also called “shaped whimsy”, created by 20th century American Lloyd F. Merrell and described in Pathways for a Poet. The foundation of the shape is similar to the Crapsey Cinquain but with fewer syllables per line. The verse form can be found on line atInstant Poems for Kids. It can also be found, spelled Lanturne, at Shadow Poetry.
The Lanterne is:
- a pentastich, a poem in 5 lines.
- syllabic, 1-2-3-4-1 syllables per line.
- is composed with no punctuation and no rhyme, each end-word should be strong.
- centered on the page. Since this is a concrete or shape poem, the length of the word on the page factors into the equation, syllable count is not enough to determine the selection.
- title optional.
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Love this! Super duper like! The naivety of the heartbroken speaker (not you, I know, my darling Princess!), comes out so sweet and strong. My dear girl, you are doing amazingly well, like I already told you in the morning. So, when do I expect you to send me that much awaited verse? 🙂
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love the ‘naivety’. 😀
yes, I am not really naive. though I once have been. Haha.
Thank you very much my dear, Nandita!
❤
P.S.
What form should we try? 🙂
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Whatever takes your fancy. I’m game for anything and everything. How about pushing ourselves for a sestina? 😉 You know where to find me. ❤
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yeah! 😀 😀 😀 Geez. sestina is scary! 😀 😀 😀
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Oh and the image is perfect.
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yay! thank you very much, Ate. ❤ ❤ ❤
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Sad when something you believe so fervently from someone you trust completely, turns out to be a lie. I like Laternes and again it was very effective of you to spell out FOREVER, letter by letter. Great job my friend 💕
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oh wow Mandi. This: “Sad when something you believe so fervently from someone you trust completely, turns out to be a lie.”, sounds really poetic. 🙂
I have read a lot of beautiful lanternes from you, thus I tried one. 🙂
Oh thank you for noticing that. 😀 Thank you very much, my friend! 🙂
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Haha. I guessed I’m poetically cursed lol. Thank you Rosema. You brighten up my evenings 🙂
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that’s a great curse to be into!!! 😀
you brighten up my morning, Mandi! you always do! 😀
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Oh.. That’s so touching and painful!
Beautifully expressed ❤
Cheers,
Srivi – AtoZChallenge
The Piscean Me | Twitter
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Yay! thank you very much, Srivi! 😀
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My pleasure 😀
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❤ ❤ ❤
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Beautiful use of the poetry form! 🙂
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Yay! Great to see you hear, Appy! 🙂 Thank you very much. 😀
How are you? ❤
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I love how you take on the challenge of so many different forms of poetry. 🙂
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Hi Olivia! Thank you very much for the visit, and for reading, and for commenting. 🙂 It is quite fun to try new forms. Forms I never heard until I try to write one. 🙂
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Oh my, that’s a heart-grabber, isn’t it!!
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it is. 🙂 thank you, Azul!
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Most welcome.
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❤
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wow this little poem grabbed my heart and wrung it.
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oh. i hope i can pick that wrung heart. 😀 i’ve written some sweet poems yesterday, to compensate for my killing spree. 😀
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Yes you did 🙂
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❤
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You are always welcome, Baini ❤ ❤ ❤
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❤ ❤ ❤ What older sister in your language?
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Awww .
Loved it .
Boys 😕😕 do not promise
If you can’t keep them .
@dixita011 from
Cafenined words
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i agree!
Thank you, Dixita!
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Oh! 😦 Heartbroken said in such a heartbreaking manner.
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oh sorry for breaking your heart, NJ. 😦
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Oh no no! You didn’t break my heart. The poem expresses heartbreak beautifully 🙂 ❤
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yay.. thank you very much! ❤
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Awwww, this is sad, but beautiful!
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oh thank you dear, PJ. Too much sweetness isn’t good for the health so i am trying to balance it out. 😀
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Hahahahaha! Okay, I understand that!
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HAHA! Thanks, dear! ❤ have a great day? I guess it's morning? 🙂
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It’s morning right now! 😀 😀 Thank you, you have a good day too!
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yay. it’s a good night for me. 😀 ❤
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LOL! I’m happy you are having a great evening! I just woke up a little while ago. It is 5:30 am here.
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So we almost have a 12-hour difference? 🙂 ❤
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I think it is about a 15 hour difference.
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wow! that far! it’s 5:33 pm here at the moment.
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It is 4:15 am here.
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ohh.
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I woke up at 2:48 am this morning. UGH
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2:48! Geez! That’s early! I hope you’re fine? ❤
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hahaha! Yes, I’m fine. The stray/feral cats had gotten into a fight outside and it woke me up. I couldn’t go back to sleep.
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Geez! those cats! HAHA
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Hahahaha! Darn cats! LOL!
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yeah!! 😀 😀 😀
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Like a lantern, you illuminate–giving utterance to sadness (generally) difficult to express. According to my guess about the time, you’re moving toward the weekend. I hope this is a pleasant weekend for you.
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Thank you for the lantern comparison, Christopher. 🙂 I spell out f-o-r-e-v-e-r to achieve the lantern shape and now I am getting a sweet lantern metaphor. 😀
Yes, it’s 10:47 am of a Friday here already. How many hours is our time difference? 🙂
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Geez!! Geez!! Geez!! One second I’m smiling ear to ear and this… </3
Haaayy… you never fail to gave me a roller coaster ride dear Rosema! You're teeming with talent. Keep it up! 😀
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Ouch. Sorry. It wasn’t supposed to be like that. The ones you read earlier our my making up posts for this heartbreak.. sorry dear. -_-
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Oh! I read it in reverse. Haha. No worries dearie. I read your cheesy, romantic post again and happy heart is back. ❤ :*
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Yeah. you did. HAHAHA
Glad your heart is back again! REady to beat some moooore! 😀
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shape poems are fun…both to write and to read..Lovely
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I agree! 🙂 Thank you for the visit! 🙂
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Heartbreaking, beautifully sad Lanterne. 🙂
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thank you very much! 🙂 🙂 🙂 I believe I read a couple of beautiful lanterne from you too my friend. ❤
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Aw, thank you. ❤️
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walang anuman! 😀
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