Seaside Surprise: A Palette*
Crystal clear sea misplaces, hugs
pristine, soft, sun-bathed sand,
young pelicans roams and glide,
golden soleil smiles from above,
as warm whispers of breeze dries
your fresh blood in my hands.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Zack Minor
In response to Daily Post: Misplaced and Napowrimo Day 11.
Today, I challenge you to write a poem in which you closely describe an object or place, and then end with a much more abstract line that doesn’t seemingly have anything to do with that object or place, but which, of course, really does.
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The Palette creates a vivid word painting within a brief and lyrical poem. It is simply a short poem, using vivid imagery. This genre was specified by Viola Berg. There is no prescribed structure or rhyme. The only mandate is the poem should create a brilliant image in the reader’s mind.
The Palette is:
- a word painting.
- framed at the discretion of the poet.
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Interesting last line “his blood on [her] hands” so either she killed him or more symbolically, she was responsible for how he died. Like Pontius Pilote washing his hands of Jesus’s blood. Great job on the form of poetry too.
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yes, Mandi! either of the two can be valid interpretation of this poem. though as i was writing this… my mind’s thinking of murder! 😀
Thank you!
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😮 ” Murder most foul.” Happy Monday. Hope your week is starting well.
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same wishes for you dear! ❤
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I chorus the preceeding comment. You are in great form, my dear Princess!
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yay! thank you, Manan! My mind’s a bit stressed. Thus the poems. 🙂
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If that is how you write when you are stressed, be stressed all the way, dear girl! Lol
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hahahaha! I think my work’s doing just that, my dearest Queen!! 😀
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I could see the sea in my mind and then whoosh! The last line brings on a whole different picture. Whoa, girl! I am learning so much here ❤ 🙂
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yay! napowrimo wanted a surprise, so there goes the last line! 😀
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Yes, and what a surprise it was!
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yay! thank you, NJ!
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I was enjoying the beach
Sea-side
Warmth
Love
But suddenly the last line woke me up!
Alas!
: )
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yay! thank you for creating another poem out of this poem! 😀
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Really sounds nice. I agree with comments above. Thank you.
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thank you very much!
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Yeesh! I’ll behave! Effective turnaround, Ms. Christie.
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oh Christopher!! I am no one compared to her! 😀
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Having read something of her life as well as many of her works (my sister and I exchange titles all the time), I think Agatha C would do nothing but admire and encourage you, Rosema. And the turns you craft into your work!
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Oh Christopher… I am speechless. Really. ❤ ❤ ❤
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Omg that last line! You have outdone yourself Rosema. What a thrilling twist to this poem!
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thank you dear, Jade. Napowrimo asked for a surprise, so there! 😀 I killed someone yet again! haha.
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Hahaha, the life of a writer 😉
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HAHAH! Actually! I am killing a lot lately! Argh.
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Oh wow I love the unexpected turn in that last line. I did not see that coming! And I know you like to frolic on the dark side. 🙂
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Yay! Glad to hear that my dear Mel! Yeah.. The dark side is up again. I killed another man again. 😂
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Oh no! Your death toll is rising! 🙂
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yeah!!! it is!!! 😀 😀 😀
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🙂
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yeah! it is! 😀 😀 😀
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🙂
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❤
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Oh my goodness, this is beyond fabulous–what an ending, WOW!
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Yay! Thank you very much, Azul! 🙂 That ending was a bit bloody, eh? 😀
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Sometimes it’s good to write a bloody end… 🙂
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that’s true. thank you, Azul. 🙂
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Most welcome.
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❤
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I can hear and feel the wind on my face, the voice of pelicans, and the beauty of all twisted beautifully at the end. Just a darling piece dear Ema! ❤
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awwww. thank you for your insightful thoughts dear Dajena! ❤ My mind's really twisted, eh? 😀
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Correction: Rosema’s mind is marvelous! ❤ ❤
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Hahaha! not twisted? i am fine with twisted! HAHA
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What a talented writer you are, my dear friend. That last line really did it. Just amazing. 💕
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you are generous in your words, my dear Annie, and I cannot thank you enough! 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Walang anuman my dear ☺️
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❤
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❤ back to you too!
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❤ ❤ ❤ more! 😀
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It reads so calm and peaceful then the ending, blood on her hands! LOL! That was a surprise alright!
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haha! sorry for the bloody surprise my dear!! 😀
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It sure was a blood surprise! LOL!!
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HAHA! Something not bloody is coming inspired by your lovely prompt! 😀
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Oh good! I look forward to reading it!
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yay! thank you!
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Wow the imaging and the pain and confusion beautifully expressed… hats off for a beautiful and marvelous work!! ❤
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oh dear Ishma!! I missed you!!! ❤ ❤ ❤
Thank you very much for reading! 😀
How are you??
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I am fine!! Same here!! Missed you much… but I had to save time for cousins that’s why I had to leave u 😥 how r ew????
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it’s okay dear. 🙂 I know life’s happening for you and I am glad it is happening. 🙂
I am fine. So fine, dear. I bet you are too. 😀
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haha Yes.. but nervousness overloaed! 😛
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geez, you are nervous about what dear?? 🙂
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😉 shhhhhhhhhhhhh secret! 😛
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alright! 😀 😀 😀
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