Serene Sea: A Senryu*
you’re a serene sea,
sometimes your screams sink me, yet
always, you save me.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Charlie Harutaka
In response to Sonya of Only 100 Words‘ Three Line Tales Week Ten.
If you want to join (it’s not too late and it is surely fun), here are the simple rules:
- Write three lines inspired by the photo prompt.
- Link back to this post.
- Tag your post with 3LineTales (so we can find you in the Reader).
- Read and comment on other TLT participants’ lines.
- Have fun.
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The Senryu is:
- a poem in 3 lines or less.
- syllabic, 17 syllables or less.
- commonly written in 3 lines but can be written in 2 lines and can be written with fewer syllables, never more.
- L1 5 syllables describes image.
- L2 7 syllables, adds conflicting image or expands first image
- L3 5 syllables provides insight (the ah ha! moment)through a juxtaposed image.
- written as a natural human experience in language that is simple, humorous, sometimes bawdy or vulgar.
- presented with an energy or liveliness in the focus and choice of words
- often humorous
- written in the moment.
- an imagist poem (draws the humor from the image)
- untitled but can be #ed.
Ooh, love it. The feel of your poem matches the feel of the photo perfectly!
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oh thank you, Jade! this poem is actually a comment. a comment i made to the photo posted my Thomas, our dear poet friend. 🙂 it’s so beautiful it made me write a poem.
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Interesting lines. Both sinking her but saving her. A bit of a conundrum. Lovely job Rosema 🙂
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thank you, Mandi.
Love is sometimes like that, it kills you yet it reminds you that you’re alive. 🙂
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WOWWWWWWWW!
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you are so sweet. ❤ ❤ ❤
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thank you, Sonya!
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You can’t have just one. Sometimes it’ll be frustrating and sometimes it’ll be beautiful. It’s the whole package 🙂 You’ve written it in a beautiful way, of course 😀
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thank you dear, NJ! Yes. Love has its own flaws and it own beauty. Love is how you take them both. 🙂
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I love the photo you selected and your words reflect the unpredictability of the seas of life.
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thank you for your kind words and for interpreting this poem that way. 🙂 a sea of life screams and saves too. 🙂 Thank you!
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I’ve been on water as smooth as glass and lost in another world. I looked over my shoulder and saw the the raging waters approaching at lightning speed. I made it to shore just in time before the lovely water morphed into a treacherous beast. There are a lot of similarities between the sea and personal relationships. 🙂
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Oh wow. Your comment sounded and felt like a poem itself. Thank you so much for sharing your insightful words. 🙂
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The pleasure is all mine. 🙂
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thank you! really! ❤
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phew, glad the sea saved you! great haiku!
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thank you, Mel! 🙂 the sea, literally and figuratively can scream and save. 😀
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I’m glad it does both! 🙂 you’re welcome
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yes! 😀
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🙂
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Lovely, “sometimes your screams sink me, yet, always, you save me.”
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yay! thank you, PJ! 😀
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such is the sea and the depth of human emotions…great metaphor in senryu, Rose 🙂
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coming from the King of beautiful metaphors… *smiling sigh* I am soooo touched! thank you my friend!
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The sea can scream, can’t it? An able metaphor, Rosema!
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yes! it can! 🙂 thank you Christopher!
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Lovely! I’ve never heard of a Senryu — I’m learning so much about poetry 🙂
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yay! glad to share it to you. 🙂
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I have a laundry list of poetry types I’ll be trying out this summer 🙂
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yay!!! that would be awesome! looking forward to that! 😀
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I hadn’t thought about putting it on my blog, but maybe…. Thank you for the encouragement 🙂
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yay! would love to read it on your blog. 🙂
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🙂
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This is beautiful, and the photo you paired your poem with is so lovely.
I really love these poems – looking forward to reading more. 🙂
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Oh thank you so much, EM! 🙂 This is actually a photo prompt. 🙂 The challenge host provide a photo and we’ll make a three-line tale out of it. 🙂
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One of the most beautiful Senryus I’ve read recently. Remarkable write, sweet Rosema. 💕
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oh no, my friend. That’s too much! ❤
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Awesome article.
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