December Goodbye: A Daina*
One year’s now down to one chilled month
with crisp wind as cold as my heart
brought by your December goodbye.
A clean slate named change, I will try.
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©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Caleb George
In response to Daily Post: Clarity and Napowrimo Day 4.
Today I challenge you to write a poem in which you explore what you think is the cruelest month, and why.
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The Daina is:
- a single quatrain.
- metered, dactylic or trochaic tetrameter. All lines usually end on unstressed syllables.
- unrhymed though alliteration and rhyme can naturally appear.
I sad, yet hopeful, write, Rosema. Love the form, too!
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oh wow! i am justt so happy you are reading me/my words again. ❤
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I have missed them, Rosema and will catch-up, i promise! ❤
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oh no worries and no pressure! 🙂 i completely understand! i am more than glad to read you again. 🙂
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Beautiful n optimistic
Gday
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oh thank you! 🙂 How are you? 🙂
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Hey Rose!
Hmm good. How abt u?
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Great, too! 😀
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They’re right. You’ve woven sadness and hope in this poem, Rosema. Well done! 🙂
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awww. thank you dear! this is somehow inspired by our wonder and wander conversation!
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I love how it’s sad and optimistic at the same time. It’s literally like a life cycle. Broken hearts will happen and yet we have to keep trying and starting afresh.
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That is true! A cycle, a turning wheel. 🙂 Thank you again, NJ! ❤
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Very evocative image painted here. And thanks for introducing me to the daina.
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Hi there! Thank you so much for your beautiful comment. 🙂
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You are are good! It is really nice to see your work in my newsfeed! 🙂
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Oh you are equally great, Kristel! 🙂 Looking forward to your poems and posts! ❤
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Your poem is fantastic and I love your wording. The “December goodbye” was a great choice.
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Oh thank you so much for your kind words. 🙂 Appreciate it a lot.
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beautiful! I love that last line about change being a clean slate. I never thought of it that way but it is!
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yeah! as i was writing this piece i just thought of that line and later realized it really made sense. 😀
Thank you, Mel!
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You’re welcome 🙂
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Loved the way you have ended it by bringing in so much hope! Its beautiful 🙂
Cheers,
Srivi
The Piscean Me | Twitter
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Hi Srivi! Thank you so much for dropping by! 🙂 I really appreciate you and your kind words. ❤
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I learned a new form today 🙂 Well done, my dear ❤
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yay! Glad to introduce you to daina, Annie! 🙂
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I agree with the previous comments: you’ve somehow woven both sadness and hope into one sweet and simple stanza. Makes me think December little differently.
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oh thank you, Jade! I have nothing against December! HAHA. But the wintry cool winds of it make it a bit melancholic, for me. 🙂
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Your control and scope is masterful. Impressed I am. Thanks.
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wow. thank you for your succinct yet sweet comment! 🙂
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Very nice, even though sad….I chose January, if you would like to read mine here:http://leonaslines.com/2016/04/04/january/
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thank you for reading, Leonas! January is my birth month. 😀
Will be reading soon!
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This one delivers a beautifully penned blow…and then the note of hopeful courage. LOVE your work Everyday!!
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oh dear Azul. You are making my chubby heart fatter! 😀
Thank you!
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Chubby heart–I LOVE that!!
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it is me i guess? HAHA
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I just love it! You’re so delightful 🙂
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hahah! you too! 😀
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Thank you 🙂
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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