Three is my favourite number. But after that candle-incident, it’s now four.
There are four candles in my cake. Mom and Dad want me to blow them all. I didn’t. Mom shouted, but not at me. She cried, wailed on the floor while I group the pasta strands in three, silently. She went inside their room then went out with her four-wheel bag. She hugged me tight. She said sorry and I love you, four times each. She left.
I think her favorite number is four.
Dad hugged me, told me not to cry. I didn’t. I can’t count my tears. I don’t like things I can’t count. Just like my mouth don’t like words it cannot say, which is all.
24 days after, mom’s still not home but I am happy. ‘Cause for the first time, Dad and I went out of the house. I can’t look at people’s eyes but I am amazed to see the long staircase. Excited to count them, I run and climbed up, up and up. I am in 44th step when I looked back.
I can’t see Dad.
Maybe his favourite number is five.
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Word count: 190
©2016 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Louise of Storyteller’s Abode
In response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (FFfAW) March 08, 2016.
Rules:
- a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less)
- each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end
- no serial (continuation) stories
- include a pingback to the challenge post
Thank you for a beautiful prompt, Priceless Joy! ❤
P.S.
This is inspired by a fictional character from the book I am currently reading; Love Anthony by Lisa Genova.
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This feels so sad.
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Yes. Sorry but this is indeed sad.
Thank you for reading.
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Don’t feel sorry, this was well written but indeed, it’s a sad story. I enjoyed reading it.
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Oh thank you, Yinglan! I love your story, too! 🙂
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Thanks. 🙂
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You’re welcome!
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Wow, Rosema! This is deep! The young girl and her mother both have OCD but over different numbers, so her mother leaves. After her mother leaves she takes over the number her mother loved and now her dad leaves because he loves a different number than her or her mother. Even though it is jumbled mess, it makes sense! Does that make me crazy?? Hahaha! GREAT story!
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Oh. I am so sorry if that is how the story has mean to you.
It is actually like this. The child has autism. He cannot talk.
His mom got tired of him and that candle-incident made her explode like a bomb. Thus leaving him. Now. his dad also left him. They cannot handle a child with autism anymore.
Thank you, PJ.
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Oh, I didn’t catch the autism, I thought it was OCD (a mental disorder) because it seemed the mother had the same thing since her favorite number was 4 (and wanted to see everything in fours) and the child’s favorite number was 3 (and wanted everything to be in threes). I loved the story anyway, Rosema and that’s what’s important – not necessarily that we all get the same meaning.
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That is so true. 🙂 And yeah… that could be interpreted as you have understood it. 🙂
Thank you dear, PJ! 😀
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Well, it made sense to me that way but after hearing your meaning behind it, it makes sense that way too!
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Yay! I am more than glad to know your views. 🙂 Atleast I know this story can be interpreted in two ways, which is good for me. 🙂
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I imagine it can be interpreted in more than 2 ways, it just depends on the readers’ POV. 🙂 Your way makes more sense than my way though. LOL!
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HAHA! Oh no! Look, Mandi also understood it as OCD-related tale. So I guess yours made more sense! 😀
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No, yours made more sense! HAHAHAHA!!
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Okay. Both makes sense. HAHA
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Yes. Hahaha! This is too funny!
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HAHA! We’re both ‘makulit’, PJ!
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That’s a neat word!
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Makulit means a person who teases someone, often in a physical way but could also be verbal, and considered a positive attribute. A kind of playfulness that friends in the Filipino culture consider a positive attribute. 🙂
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How cute! I’ll try and remember that word.
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YAY! It fits you, right? 😀
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Right. Mikalut??
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XD
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What does XD stand for?
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That’s a smiley. 😀
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Oh. I have seen several people use it and I didn’t know what it meant. LOL
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Now you know. 😉😀
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Makulit!
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Yeah!!! Makulit. 😀
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haha I think I caught this same meaning!! 😛 OCD was what struck me when I read these words, but poetry can never be judged with ONE meaning.. it conveys different things to different people. 🙂 That’s especially when the poet is amazing like you! 😉 :*
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Oh Ishma! You’re making me blush right now!!!
Thank you soooo much! 😀 😀 😀
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I wish I were there to witness that Mindblowing sight! 😉
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Haha! 😀 😀 😀
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Wow, complex. OCD all of them? How do you reconcile all those numbers to people who suffer from OCD? Maybe you can’t? That is so sad. Well done my friend. 🙂
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Oh yeah. You’re the second person to say it is OCD. 🙂 While my perspective says it is autism, I am still glad to know how you intepreted it. 🙂
Thank you dear, Mandi!
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Yeah, there are similar aspects in that area of illnesses to some degree. You’re welcome.
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Yes. Thanks again, Mandi!
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Excellent take on the image Rose. Its great how other writings can inspire us, says something about the quality of what you must be reading.
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Oh thank you, Michael. The book I am reading now is really thought-provoking. 🙂 I hope you enjoyed my little tale. 🙂
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Moving, thought-provoking, and heart breaking. Shame on me for not recognizing the autistic aspects until l saw your explanation to PricelessJoy. Since we have several autistics (various areas of the spectrum) in our family I should have.
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Oh thank you so much for your kind words. 🙂
It’s okay. 🙂 Mandi said there is a lot of similarity between autism and OCD (you might thought of that, too). And maybe I wasn’t clear enough. 🙂
Thank you!
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Any similarities between OCD and autism are in appearance only. OCD is an anxiety disorder while those with ASD have repetitive/ritualistic behaviors that are likely beyond their ability to control or understand.
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Oh… thank you for that clarification. 🙂 The book, which inspired me to write this, talks about autism. That is why the character of this tale has indeed an autism. I tried to describe it as clear as I can. 🙂
Thanks again!
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You’re welcome.
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BTW, I’ll be looking for your posts during the AtoZ Challenge. It’s my first year so I’m hoping I can meet the challenge.
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Oh this is my first time to join, too! 🙂 Good luck to the both of us! 😀
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Oh wow, Rosema. What a creative piece this is. After reading it I felt so sad for the child, to have been left by both parents. Way to go at tugging the heart strings. 🙂
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Oh thank you so much, Thomas! (for your insightful thoughts and for back-reading! *kilig*)
Yes.. I feel sad for him and I feel some guilt because I do that to him. But…it do happens in real life, sadly.
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You are welcome, Rosema 🙂 I have missed your work and have been looking forward to reading you all week! It does happen, I know.
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Awww. You are making me blush right now!!! ☺☺☺
Yeah. Work is always the reason, for me, and I think for you too?
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🙂 🙂 Yes, it has been for me these past few weeks. I finish this project on Monday and after that I am free until June so I hope to be able to get back to reading and writing more regularly.
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Wow. Congratulations, then! ❤❤❤
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Thanks 🙂 <3<3
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Excited to read your poems again! ❤❤❤
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I am happy and can’t wait to catch up with your wonderful words 🙂 ❤ ❤
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Oh there goes another sweet words from you, Thomas!
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🙂 I hope you like sugar!
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I love it though my body don’t because sugar give it more calories but I don’t really care. 😂😂😂
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🙂 🙂
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I didn’t get the OCD or Autism 😦 I only see two adults finding reason to breakup and leaving a child behind. Oops!
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That is the saddest part.
Thank you dear Fun!
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Oh my I hope better days are ahead
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Yes. I hope a kind hearted couple with find him and adopt him.
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Me too 🙂
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Awweee… to be left behind by the people you love and trust the most. </3 😥
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Yeah.. I pity the kid. And I hate myself for doing it to him. -_-
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No don’t… 🙂 I believe someone will find him, someone more patient and who won’t give up easily on him. He’s a good kid.
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Yes. Maybe a couple looking for a kid. ❤ 🙂 Thank you dear!
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We could always hope for the best. 🙂
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I agree. 😉
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I had forgotten to post my story to the Blue Froggy yesterday, and realized that I hadn’t seen anyone’s stories! So, I went to the linkup and posted mine, and then, saw yours!
It’s a beautiful story, Rosema! Very moving! I like how you used numbers to tell the story — the child understands the world in the only rational way she or he can. Nicely done!
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Oh. I also used to forget about that. 🙂
Thank you so much. It means a lot to me. 🙂
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You are most welcome! 🙂
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This reminds me of the book, “Al Capone Does My Shirts” by Gennifer Choldenko. Have you read it.
And I’m also reminded of “The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night Time.” A stunningly beautiful book, which you must read, if you haven’t already done so.
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Thank you, Vijaya! I am glad this little piece has reminded you of two great books. 🙂 Yes, I have read The Curious Incident.. That book was also mentioned in the novel that inspired this piece which is Love Anthony by Lisa Genova. Have you read that? 🙂
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You’re welcome! Alas, no, I have not read Love Anthony. Looks like I’ll have to amend that! 🙂
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I hope you would like it, too!:)
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Autism can be so hard on parents. I feel sorry for the poor child, abandoned by both of his/her parents. I love the use of the child’s viewpoint – the way they view everyone else as having the same number fixation as them. A powerful story, really we’ll done. 🙂
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Oh thank you so much! 🙂 I appreciate your words. Yes, I pity the child, too.
Thanks again!
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