With uncombed hair tied hastily by a ponytail, I am preparing breakfast at full speed when my little lad shouted, “Mom! Mom!!”
His little voice vibrated around as he shouts for me to go to our living room.
“Dad’s on the news mom! Mom!!!”
“Wha—,” I said as I hurriedly went out to see.
My heartbeat raced as I saw him on the TV. For the third time this week, he’s playing as a pacifier of the first-calm-then-soon-angry rallyists.
I remembered how his chief bleed almost to death when he was hit with a wooden placard last Tuesday.
I didn’t noticed I was holding my breath until I felt little hands tapping my thighs.
“I smell burned eggs, Mom.”
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Word count: 120
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Photo credit: Sunday Photo Fiction
In response to Sunday Photo Fiction for February 28, 2016.
Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly writing challenge hosted by Alastair Forbes where a photo is used as a prompt for a piece of fiction using around 200 words. The piece doesn’t have to center around exactly what the photo is, it can be just used as a basis for a story.
Excellent! I could feel the build-up of tension and then the finale – burned eggs! LOL!
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Haha! Thank you, PJ! This week, I will try to do away with my dark-writer-self, so I tried to keep it tensed yet light at the same time. 😀
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I thought it was excellent! I loved it!
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Oh thank you so much! 😀 😀 😀
My mind’s starting to create a story for your prompt. (I saw it early today!)
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Oh goodie! I can hardly wait to read it! 🙂
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Oh… I only have the skeletons… HAHA! I don’t have the fullness of it yet!
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I’m sure it will be wonderful!
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Oh thank you for the vote of confidence!
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🙂 🙂
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Great take on the prompt. It would be quite worrying to have your partner in the crowd when his colleague almost bled to death earlier. Great build up.
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Thank you, Mandi! 🙂 She is indeed tensed to see her hubby. But I think he will be safe. 😀
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Good to know 🙂
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Yay! Thank you dear!
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Characters and crisis come fast and compelling. A creative and distinctive response to the prompt. Well-drawn work!
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Oh thank you so much, Christopher! 🙂 Your words are just so wise and humbling. 🙂
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A well spun story with a burnt offering at the end 🙂
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Yay!!! Glad to see you here, lovely Dajena! ❤
Thank you for your kind words. 😀
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I seconded with PJ. Great tension built up with a tinge of humour! Well done! 😀
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Yay! I tried to be funny, I hope I did? 😀
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Yes! You’ve succeeded! 😀
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Really???? I did???? 😀 😀 😀
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Of course! 😀 😀 😀
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YAY!!! That just made my daaay! ❤
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Well, you always made mine! 😘😘😘
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You it for me too!
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I didn’t see those blackened eggs coming! 😊Her kid has a good presence of mind!😊
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Haha! Thank you!
It is because the kid thought his dad’s now a TV star (cause he saw him on TV). 😀 He isn’t as nervous as her mom. 😀
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Tense story with a cute kid!
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Haha! That kid is just so innocent! 😀
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Yes he is! 🙂
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Haha! 😀 Thanks for reading, Mel!
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You’re welcome 🙂
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A great story, Rosema!
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How great is great? HAHA 😀
Thank you, Thomas!
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Just perfect I’d say, Rosema 🙂 🙂 You are welcome 🙂
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Oh that’s so sweet of you. 🙂 Thanks!
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You are welcome 🙂
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Incredibly well-written and gripping. Nicely done!
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Oh thank you so much, Caitlin! 🙂
P.S.
I think the website linked on your gravatar isn’t your blog?
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Oh shoot. Thank you for telling me! https://fullofjoyhappenings.wordpress.com/
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Thank you, Caitlin. I think you should link it directly to your profile. 🙂 So that when I click your name or photo it will direct me and your other readers to your blog. 🙂
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I like the pacing of the tension and then the suddenly twist at the end. Well written.
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Oh thank you for such an insightful comment. 🙂
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The police have a very hard job at those. Especially if they differ from their own viewpoint a great deal. I like the way you showed it from the partner’s viewpoint.
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Oh thank you. 🙂 I have watched a lot of these scenes in news because ours is a democratic country.
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Loved how you built the drama! Then a climax of burnt eggs… nicely done!
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Oh thank you for your kind comments, Roger! I appreciate it a lot! 😀
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