Hidden Seconds

Sitting still

in a steel stool,

she begs, weeps

for one more second.

Endearing,

exquisite enchanter,

ends first cry on

her life’s first second.

Captured candid

cheesy charade,

changed by sudden

death in a second.

Old oak observes

ordeals, orbits of

earth’s occupants’

every second’s beat.

Nervous nerves

never needed,

not in a stage

she owns for one second.

Dream desired

delivers disappointment

deserves encouragement

for just one more second.

Sorry, seconds could

not be stolen, saved so

snag, snap, smack

sing, spin, swing,

stay…

every single second.

©2015 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.

Photo credit: Magic4walls


In response to Writing 101:

Day 4: Seconds by @rosemawrites 

(Yep that’s me! :D)

A new life sees the world for the first time. Simultaneously, another life takes its final breath.

A passenger that was supposed to board a plane was one second late. Hours later, the plane went missing, the passenger saved.

Unimportant as it may seem, a split second can change our lives in ways we can never imagine. So today, write about the basic unit of time, seconds. Reflect on those few seconds when a loved one was in a life-and-death situation. Relive the few seconds when you held your eldest child for the first time. Recount those seconds when you were waiting for big news that was about to change your life.

~

52 thoughts on “Hidden Seconds

      1. They are different stories, happening at different places, within that second. This is what I perceived: begging for a second chance, newborn baby’s first cry, RPG game, nature, stage fright, feeling dejected due to unrealised dream (somewhere around that line). Did I get the right feeling?

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      2. Oops! Haha…I thought it’s RPG game where one second he’s is fighting and next second killed! LOL! Watched too RPG game lately! 😀

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  1. Very nice. I loved the alliteration and assonance. Your poem had a nice rhythm. I liked how each small stanza described a ‘second’ a moment in time. The one about the stillborn baby or baby who died at birth is particularly sad. And then you tell us to stay to spend a second thinking it all through. Very nicely done. I noticed you wrote the prompt for today kudos!

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    1. I don’t know why but I haven’t replied to your reply, eh? Sorry!

      Thank you for your insightful thoughts, Mandi! You indeed notice the little details, and I just love that about you. 🙂

      Yes, Day 04’s prompt is mine. 🙂

      Thank you again, Mandi!

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  2. Although I followed last poetry course, and should know better about it, I’m not very good at it to comment technically. But you had pros above giving you an excellent review.
    I can simply say how your words touched me softly and deeply for the story-like structure of your stanzas have a common thread that anyone can recognize from those tough seconds of their life journeys. Beautiful!
    And congrats for the prompt.

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  3. I got it on the second read. I’m afraid the first time I just took in all the impressions and sensations. And appreciated the hidden seconds, hidden because they happen between persons who are not near each other at all except in cessation and resumption of life. Then I got the second (pardon the pun) hidden seconds in the second (pardon the pun) reading. The dominance of certain sounds within each stanza. Everyone above seems to have gotten the acrostic faster than me. Good work! Thanks!

    I’d like to nominate you for the Sunshine Blog Award. Anyone who commutes the way you do deserves an award (and an express monorail). You write so brightly and hopefully. Your commentary’s cheerful, too. Here’s the link to my blog entry with the rules and icon for the award–

    https://clcouch123.wordpress.com/2015/12/10/sunshine-blogger-award-my-nominating-process/

    Hoping you don’t mind, Congratulations!–Christopher

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    1. I love all the pun you have here, Christopher (And thank you for giving me the name of the face I frequently see in my posts! 😀 )
      Thank you for your insightful thoughts, as always. 😀 And for your kind words!
      I surely appreciate the awards, Christopher. 🙂 Thank you sooo much!

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