Her heart ripped her apart. Now it’s my part to take all her wrath. Sharp as diamond knife cuts through me to end her life.
Oh, my pain, is it her gain? Oh, will this cut, erase her hurt? Oh, will this wound, do any good?
I froze as her blood flows. I feel the nerves died as her heart tries to decide. To beat or not to beat. To live or not to live.
©2015 Rosemawrites@A Reading Writer. All Rights Reserved.
Photo credit: Enkivillage
In response to Writing 201 Day 3 assignment:
Day 3: Skin, Prose Poem, Internal Rhyme
Our skin often announces (correctly or not) our age and ethnicity, tells stories of injuries, operations, and accidents, and conveys to our brain everything from the pain of a slap to the warmth of a hug.
Skins aren’t only a human thing: they protect animals, fruit, cheese, and more. For today’s poem, choose whatever meaning of “skin” speaks to you the most.
I never thought that I can tell a fictional story through poetry. Not until I have read some awesome poems from some of the great poets from Writing 201: Poetry class.
So inspired by your very well-written posts, I humbly present this another FIRST prose poem from yours truly.
Please feel free to give unbiased and truly honest feedbacks.
As a newbie I will surely appreciate it.
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Wow! Beautiful! I didn’t know we can tell a story through poetry either. You’ve opened my eyes. 🙂 You are really good with poetry despite being a novice! 🙂
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Yay! Thank you Fun! 🙂 I have read a poem yesterday, it’s a shame I can’t remember who have written it, that has a ‘story’ in it so I tried. 🙂
I am glad it worked, to you! 🙂 Thank you!!!
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Yes, it’s beautiful! 🙂
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Thank you, as always!!! 😀
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To beat!! So courageous in your transparency. 🙂
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Yay. Thank you so much! 😀 This is fiction, though. 🙂
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wow.. this si beautiful… truly amazing!! ❤
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Yay? Really? 🙂
Is it realistic? Is it believable?
Thank you! 😀
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yes.. I could feel the pain that person must have gone through! 😉
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Yay! That’s great to hear. I have some doubts about this because I personally haven’t felt this dark emotions so.. thank you! 🙂
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Maybe I took it another sense.. every poetry can be takin into new meanings.. Its not necessary that the reader feels the same as u do! 😉
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Yay. Thank you! 😀
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heeh anytym 😉
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😀
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That’s indeed deep! Intense. I can feel the pain conveyed there! Nicely written. 🙂
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Oh thank you Kristine! I told you this is way the opposite of your feel-good post! 😀
Thank you for the visit!
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C’est magnifique 😀
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Crazily warped dark thoughts. Weaves a lot of imagery in the mind! You young lady are getting quite prolific in these poetic things 🙂
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Aww. Your words are just the best motivator! Thank you, Jacq! 🙂
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You are truly welcome 🙂
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Beautifully on point (pardon the pun)! Short and sweet, a true picture of what one thinks of when on the brink. You are a natural! 🙂
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Yay! Thank you so much! I am so happy that it appeared as realistic as possible. 🙂
Your words will make my heart burst, soon! 😀
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You’re welcome! Oh no, please don’t let it burst you still have so much to say, do and places to go 😉
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Haha. Thank you! 😀 You have done a great job, too! 😀
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beautiful! you’r such a great writer! 🙂
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You’ve done a good job. I’m glad I stopped by. 🙂
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Yay! That’s so heartwarming to know. Thank you! 😀
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Very, very good, Rosema! Well done! 🙂
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Thank you, Annie! I though it was a big too dark. What do you think? 😀
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I think a little bit of darkness wouldn’t hurt. In fact, it adds a dash of colour 🙂
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Yay. That’s good to hear. 😀
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🙂
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Amazing. You have the ability to capture thoughts very well.
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Aww. Thank you, Aman! You don’t know how your words can really really motivate me! 🙂
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Whoa! This is just beautiful! So much emotions in those words. Very well written 🙂
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Thank you, Mimi! This is just a product of imagination so I am glad that I pulled it off. 🙂 Thank you so much!
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You told a very thought-provoking story, told brilliantly through poetry.
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Oh, Edwina! You will make my heart burst with too much gratitude! You’re just so sweet! 🙂
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Thank you Rose 😊
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Great job! I read it twice to understand the “skin” part.
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Aww. Maybe I wasn’t too clear?
Thank you, Cathy!
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It was clear. I just didn’t get it for some reason at first.
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Okay, Cathy! 😀
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Awesome poem. Really!! 🙂
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Yay! Thank you! What do you like about it? 🙂
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It is a crisp attention grabbing read!
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Yay!!! You used few words that elated me so much! Thank you!!!
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This is great! Very inspiring to read 🙂
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Thank you, Clarissa! Isn’t it too dark? Thanks!
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No no, it’s just the perfect amount of dark 🙂 It makes it more lyrical and flows very nicely. You’re welcome!
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Yay. That’s great to hear! Thanks, again! 😀
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