WRITING 101: The Yellow Bus

From: http://uma-rapariga-simples.blogspot.com/

My task is simple.

Determined, I walked towards the old yellow bus that will leave before 10 a.m.

I sit still. I need to focus. I have to stop thinking. Because I may have doubts.

——

We finally gave our final kisses.

This is not our last goodbye but I can’t stop the tears.

I ended our tight hug and finally let go of her.

She then finally went inside the yellow bus.

She will be leaving before 10 am to finally pick the dress that she will be wearing on our wedding day.

I would like to come with her but she refused.

Because she wanted it to be a surprise.

—–

I hate seeing people who kissed in public.

In my own country we never do that. But here, I think it’s normal.

“Stop.” I tell myself.

I have to focus.

This yellow bus is leaving before 10 am.

I should leave earlier.

——-

I stayed waiting for her yellow bus to leave.

I stand and blow air kisses as she look at me through the not-so-clear window.

I would never ever let go of her lovely brown eyes until a man with a blue cap bump into me.

I look at him, straight to his eyes.

He looked at me, too.

But I stopped staring because 10 am is near, and my love will be leaving.

———

Finally, off I go.

I wanted to run. But I didn’t.

I walked briskly amid this busy city’s humidity.

I reached my final spot.

Far from what will happen.

But near enough to see the yellow bus.

I waited until…

———-

I waved unceasingly as the yellow bus went away.

I stopped when she cannot see me any more.

Until…

———

Scream. Sirens. Blood.

Almost no traces of yellow bus was left.


This is in response to Blogging University’s WRITING 101 Day 13 Assignment:

Day 13: Compose a series of vignettes

Today, tell a story through a series of vignettes (short, episodic scenes or anecdotes) that together read as variations on the same theme. They can each be as short or long as you see fit — they don’t have to be the same length — but they need a common feature to tie them together, whether it’s a repeated phrase, a similar setting, or the appearance of the same person.


Yay!

This is yet another new writing experience for me.

So, please take time to share your feedback.

🙂

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73 thoughts on “WRITING 101: The Yellow Bus

      1. When I read something, I try to picture it at the same time. I felt the thrill of the kiss, the anticipation of seeing the loved one and then the horror of the crash all pulled in. Maybe lovely might not be the right word but splendidly done!

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      1. YES, really! Isn’t it beautiful trying something new and learning about your abilities? I’m trying to do the same. There’s so much power in experimenting with new things; you never know what gifts you’ll discover 😎

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  1. i’ve read this 3 times. first just like how u normally read a story, cover to cover. then read it again but this time only with the guy’s perspective then the 3rd with the girl’s. kudos on this masterpiece.

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  2. It is interesting to me that the bus is yellow. Here in the USA, the buses that take the children to school are yellow. So I keep thinking you are writing about children.

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    1. Hi there, Cheri! Thank you for reading! I am wishing to get a comment/critique from you and Susan and now I finally get one!
      Thank you for the assignments, too! I never thought that I have the ability to write such pieces so thank you! I am discovering a lot about my writer-self because of you and this Writing 101 course! 😀

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    1. Yay, yes Annie. I was really surprised. 😀 Susan just told me. I almost cried because… I don’t know anything about vignettes so it’s really unexpected.. 😀

      Thank you for reading and for the kind words, as always. 😀

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